Rewrite of Amenonuhoko: Spear of Heaven
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Nayari, being an ex-pharmacist, after his two years long journey, he decided to go to school.
He'd only hoped for a normal school life, but people who he knew and who he will know will start coming into his life once more. Will he be able to smile along side his friends, or be dragged down by the thing he had once caused?

Amenonuhoko: Flowers Garden

This is a brutally honest review. The grammatical errors in this novel are extremely numerous, easily solved by some extra time proof reading and editing, one could even hire an editor. A large number of adjectives are incorrectly used, using the word 'horrified' in -a horrified version of a human, a goblin- is completely wrong. Although understandable, it makes the reader spend more time thinking about that mistake then the actual demi human itself. The fight scenes are, unfortunately, very bland. The description of each move seems very basic, although the author may not be an expert in combat/or understand how to fight, you could just watch a couple of videos or even check wikipedia. The way I plan my action scenes (I'm not a combat expert either) is to read up on certain moves, and try and fit each one into a combo. The reason why the fight at CH2 was boring was due to the lack of detail and a very important factor: The monsters didn't seem threatening at all. Instead of describing how he defeated them with ease using his techniques or special moves, the author just says that he instantly downed wolves with a single punch or kick, which doesn't seem realistic at all. An explanation of his (possible) inhuman strength? Would be nice. The logic seems a bit flawed however, I don't mean to be this harsh. It would be great if the author learns from these and makes a more 'fun' read, I don't know whether these problems solve themselves later on but either way, good luck with your writing. (No hard feelings, + you're welcome for the tips.)

The writing quality was alright however there were many grammatical mistakes and unnecessary words were used. Another problem was the flow of the novel but as the chapter progressed the pacing became much better. 

Your updates are...interesting. But I can relate that exams are annoying.

The vague points at the beginning will indeed intrigue the audience however if there is nothing binding them to learn more about the character such as development then it is quite difficult for readers to continue reading.

Everything else seemed pretty much great.

Even though I see many flaws, I'll still give this story five stars to encourage a fellow author. 

As all authors have it, we made some typos and misused of words here and there. Author, you should install Grammarly program to help you on those parts or you can get an editor. (I also need an editor tbh)

For the rest of the story, it's too early to tell. Some stories are late bloomer, such as Overgear or other novels. This story can be one of them.

All in all, give it a try. The author has a unique way to present the story, so it might interest you.

I am going to be honest in this. The way of writing is definitely new to my eyes. The idea is really great, and the plot is good so far. Try to enlarge the paragraphs a bit. But really a good one, keep it up! 👍

Due to some minor and major changes in story details, I'll now focus on the  rewrite instead of the original one.
If anyone have supported the original novel, please support this one too as I'll be really grateful.
I thank you for spending your time reading this and I hope you have a great day.