A New Beginning in a Mana Apocalypse

To start off I don't dislike your story, on the contrary, i think it's pretty good. I applaud you for your good grammar and sentence structure. Now my biggest disappointment with this story has to be the characters in the way that they affect the story. To start off none of the characters act like they're in an apocalyptic situation. all of them seem to be very unbothered by the peril they are in, they act like the apocalypse is just another Tuesday. And with the addition of annoying characters like courtney and that other thot, the story becomes less about the apocalypse and more of a highschool drama.

The MC seems a scaredy cat that run away from everything, he doesnt try to become stronger at all and doesnt even listen to the advice his parents gave him. He use his own logic without thinking about facts and ehat other tell him, "If I think it's like that, it's like that". He has talent, but doesnt fight at all; putting talent on a person like that is wasted..

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I think you have a good start, I like the main character. I’m really looking forward to seeing what happens to him. I’m also looking forward to the story picking up and to see how how many wives he ends up with.

As the author it is a given that I will give myself a good review. This may be my first work but I have some great ideas for this story, though it might take some time for me to get there. I hope you will enjoy my own version of an apocalypse story as much as I will writing it.

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Great history just a bit to much into the *** part but still great its a must read one of my favorites right now keep up the good work im waiting alot from this

Firstly I just binged read up to chapter 55 and I must say thank you as I am enjoying this story. The lack of seriously over used cliches and nipple twisting plot turns. Also just the overall plot direction being generally unguessable is worth the read. I have read a lot of stories and this one I must say have the potential to be in my top ten that I would recommend and reread when I want to enjoy the story all over again.

Really enjoying this so far. If I had one major problem is that at times too much 'stuff' (read plot development) is happening and thus character development takes a back seat. I would like to see things slow down a bit so we can get some more character development, especially between the MC and his ladies.

Very good. Keep up the good work. Good Original novels are very rare nowadays, everywhere it's just trash novels with ****ty prose structure which is just a pain to the eyes. Among these your novel truly stands out as a gem. Just don't drop the story. 💎💎💎💎💎💎💎💎💎💎💎💎💎💎💎💎💎💎💎💎

Out of the many books I've started reading and dropped, or even keep on reading, this one has my captivated so early on in the story more so than any of the other ones so far. The quality of the writing is excellent, with not too many huge info dumps, and the info dumps are still easier to read through than most other stories. The character's haven't gotten a whole lot of time to let their colors fly yet, I believe, but a good picture is being painted of who they may potentially turn out to be. I hope the author is able to continue on with this story, and is able to maintain a sane state of mind once this book starts receiving the popularity it deserves.

this novel is good, it should be in the top rating, ill vote for this everyday now, just pleaze dont drop it🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇🙇

Just read the first page and I was forced to give a review the story line is so cleanly writing that you would not notice it an orginal novel, the flow of the story keeps you tuned in. worth reading, really good keep up the good work want to see your world come to life in the minds of more readers

Livro muito bom, recomendo muito verem ele, uma boa história para passar o tempo, se você não sabe o que ler, posso garantir que a história desse livro vai te surpreender