Portals 'n' Bubbles

The concept is unique and original, but the grammar drags it down. The grammar improved a lot in the second chapter which is a good sign, the world seems hollow due to the low amount of world background and character development but it only has three chapters so it will improve with time. Good novel, continuing working hard.

There are only three chapters, and it's still early to say how the story will go, but, I can see the potential. First of all... the cover is gorgeous!! The writing was good, although I'd love a longer chapter and shorter sentences. I'm easily distracted, so I preferred shorter sentences (it'll look nicer when I read through apps). Derek's world with portals from bubbles sounds interesting. I'd love to see where the story will go from now on.

Word of advice, read your chapters before posting. The amount of spelling and grammatical errors is nothing short of horrifying. It honestly ruins the flow of your story telling which is a shame because the concept is definitely interesting. Read it aloud, read it slowly or look up how to properly spell a word. It takes a little bit of time, trust me I know but in the long run you have less people giving up on your book because they can't immerse themselves or ask questions. You barely introduced your main character. the lack of words makes it hard to picture who your character is. The personality is there, the development is there too but basically your picturing a teenager boy with a blank face, blank build and a moderator back story. Your chapters lengths are completely up to you. If you keep them short, you can update it at the speed of sound, if they are too long it's harder to leave at a cliffhanger. Stick to your preference but I will warn you once you get into adding characters and other realms it will be hard to keep track of everything. Write it down somewhere so you can use it as a reference. Final verdict, go back and figure out how you want someone to see the novel. Your words create a mini movie in someone's mind and not everyone can picture the same thing without proper guidance. If you can't see your work as a movie then try to picture as a comic and you telling someone blind what is going on. Once you grasp that idea I can guarantee once your chapters start to accumulate you will see your writing improve ten folds.