James De Los Santos is working as an encoder then one day while reading his favorite wuxia novel he's spirit been transferred to another world.

He was sent to the body of James Long who died by the viciousness of his clan.

Let's follow him and his journey to become a strong warrior and saved his mother and search his father. 
Along the way, he will unravel many secrets.

THE GREAT DRAGON

I read only one chapter only to realize how garbage and unreadable this story is. It starts off seemingly from nowhere, or if it does specify, the grammatical mistakes makes it impossible to understand. There’s no real dialogue separations and sentences are incredibly short which makes it harder to read. I understand if it’s a new writer but cmon, reread and proof read it before you post it. This is hard to read, period. Hopefully you read this comment and learn how you can improve your writing.

Sentence/Structure : 0 ; invalid, no structure
Story : 0 ; invalid, story is barely readable with only few plot elements present.
Grammar : -5 ; the author seems as if he/she didn’t try at all.
Presentation : -10 ; the presentation is awful and characters are seemingly randomly thrown in making the already difficult to read story, more difficult to understand. 
Overall : -3/10
This story and writing in general is fucking trash, no I’m not kidding, don’t read this ****. Please, don’t. The author needs to improve on presentation, grammar, structure and plot before he could ever receive any good comments.

Structural Improvements,
it takes baby steps to reach big steps. Work on capitalizing your sentences, ie, dialogue.
"He stood, staring into the empty room known as the abyss room. 
He wondered if he could ever see the light of day after being trapped here for a century."
That's a example I came up with in less than a minute, theres some mistakes but its generally what you want to aim for in your next chapters. Description and details need to also be improved upon.