The story was great. But in my opinion the chapter 1 lacks more details/scenario about the main character. Although the story flows it really well. And based what i read. It looks like it is your first time? Or you have been done several stories? In order to improve your writing skills. Just read and analyze other stories ******* or professional writers. To know more techniques or other type of delivering a stories. Overall Iโm very satisfied of what i have been read.
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๐ธ๐น๐น๐ธ๐น๐น๐ธ ๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น ๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น ๐ธ๐น๐น๐น๐น๐น๐ธ ๐ธ๐ธ๐น๐น๐น๐ธ๐ธ ๐ธ๐ธ๐ธ๐น๐ธ๐ธ๐ธ ๐ธ๐ธ๐ธ๐น๐ธ๐ธ๐ธ ๐ธ๐๐โคโบ๐๐ธ โจ๐๐โจ๐๐โจ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ โจ๐๐๐๐๐โจ โจโจ๐๐๐โจโจ โจโจโจ๐โจโจโจ
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๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐ฅฐ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐๐๐ฅฐ
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๐๐๏ธ๐๐๏ธ๐๐๏ธ๐ค๐โค๏ธโฅ๏ธโค๏ธโฅ๏ธโค๏ธโฅ๏ธ๐คฉ๐๐โบ๏ธ๐๐๐๐โบ๏ธโฅ๏ธโค๏ธโฅ๏ธโค๏ธโฅ๏ธโค๏ธโฅ๏ธ๐ค๐๏ธโ๐โ๐ซ๐๐ซ๐๐ซ๐๐ซ๐โบ๏ธโฅ๏ธโบ๏ธโฅ๏ธโค๏ธโฅ๏ธโค๏ธ๐ค๐๏ธ๐๐๏ธ๐๐๐โค๏ธ๐โบ๏ธโบ๏ธ๐โบ๏ธโฅ๏ธ๐คโค๏ธ๐คโค๏ธ๐คโค๏ธ๐โค๏ธ๐
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โค๏ธ๐๐คฉ๐๐โค๏ธโค๏ธ๐คฉ๐๐โค๏ธโค๏ธ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐๐โค๏ธ๐ต๐ต๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คฉ๐คฉ๐๐๐คฉ๐คฉ๐๐๐๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐ตโค๏ธ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐ตโค๏ธ๐คฉ๐ต๐๐โค๏ธ๐๐๐๐๐บ๏ธ๐พ๐พ๐ป๐ป
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The story was great. But in my opinion the chapter 1 lacks more details/scenario about the main character. Although the story flows it really well. And based what i read. It looks like it is your first time? Or you have been done several stories? In order to improve your writing skills. Just read and analyze other stories ******* or professional writers. To know more techniques or other type of delivering a stories. Overall Iโm very satisfied of what i have been read.
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