Hey everyone, the author here I wanted to see I had this story in my mind for a long time, and now that I'm here, I to deliver my story to you all. I hope that you all will like my novel it is my first one EVER, so I thought lets just do this and see how it goes it may still have some problems. Still, with time I will fix them and keep riding the story to better quality for my readers, so I hope you all will like it and continue reading it in the future.
5 years ago
1
lordZetsuma
NIce man great story and plot i liked how it went and its just the beginning i hope you make a lot more chaps soon so i can keep reading this story great work
5 years ago
2
ga_ichiro
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5 years ago
2
Loyalscum
The way you wrote your first chapter does not read off like a prologue when i read it it felt more like someone telling a beadtime story to a little kid which would have been a way better opener if that was what you were going for but you obviously weren't so i suggest you remove all the personal statements were its like he is second guessing what did and did not happen. In a prologue your suppose to be sure about these things if the prologue is traditionaly write that is. Also you have a lot of grammar errors all over your story. Fix those and you will be good.
This is a review swap so check out my book my MC is evil so if you like the dark side read it. Its called unusual world
https://***.webnovel.com/book/15094015305771305/Unusual-world
5 years ago
1
Kami_No_Goku
Good story I'm new here but for my first book, it was good to read so il keep reading it in the future. I hope he unlocks his true power soon :D
Hey everyone, the author here I wanted to see I had this story in my mind for a long time, and now that I'm here, I to deliver my story to you all. I hope that you all will like my novel it is my first one EVER, so I thought lets just do this and see how it goes it may still have some problems. Still, with time I will fix them and keep riding the story to better quality for my readers, so I hope you all will like it and continue reading it in the future.
NIce man great story and plot i liked how it went and its just the beginning i hope you make a lot more chaps soon so i can keep reading this story great work
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The way you wrote your first chapter does not read off like a prologue when i read it it felt more like someone telling a beadtime story to a little kid which would have been a way better opener if that was what you were going for but you obviously weren't so i suggest you remove all the personal statements were its like he is second guessing what did and did not happen. In a prologue your suppose to be sure about these things if the prologue is traditionaly write that is. Also you have a lot of grammar errors all over your story. Fix those and you will be good. This is a review swap so check out my book my MC is evil so if you like the dark side read it. Its called unusual world https://***.webnovel.com/book/15094015305771305/Unusual-world
Good story I'm new here but for my first book, it was good to read so il keep reading it in the future. I hope he unlocks his true power soon :D
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