Cyber Steampunk

yh I think you should work on your description and writing skill, I find it very hard to understand what's going on

Umm, I feel like you need to make the characters have some issues and describe stuff and explain stuff, the world background is good but the design like descriptions aren't really great, a tip is to try to describe important characters, if not important, try at least give some descriptions of minor characters like: A man with a suit appeared. Like it give minimal description to give the reader a bit of way to undersand, I hope you will improve with me as well, do not give up :)))