The Indomitable Mage, Ruler of The Universe
How would you feel if you were trapped in a dream? How would you react to the temptation that is before your sinful eyes?
What if you were killed in that mind game of the dreams, are they really lethal let alone, dreams?
To his horror when he opened his eyes, he realized that he didn't wake up yet rather was still dreaming.
He was often drifted into a dreamland of weirdness but this time, it was completely unusual. He could feel the pain, emotions of ecstasy as he was having fun in a sexual wonderland.
Although it sounded nonsensical yet satisfactory with those elven ladies serving him, but later on, it brought disaster because his dreams had always ended up with terror-struck and profusely sweating awakening.
Several elven girls were serving him as his tool of enjoyment, a bewitching captive princess was there for his needs until he passed out from exhaustion hoping to wake up from this 'realistic dream'.
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Editor: Aysel_Inara.
Cover: YGS-Yueyi
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Writing Quality is okay. Stability of updates is poor so far. You may be busy, but if you want to establish your novel updates stability should be good. Story development is so far progressing really good. I hope that you will re-write the chapter 2 and 3 like chapter 1. Character design is not complete yet. So I am hoping you have something great in your mind. As for world background, you gave a hint. It will be an elvish world. I love Elf related novels and movies. I will keep your novel in check. I hope you will be able to give us a big surprise.
I like the idea of an introduccion whit details, i dont think the story is slow, i start to read and i need more charpter alredy hahaha i like it. The descriptions are concrect and the way it describe the scenary really let me imagine the situation ... you have a good story to tell, and i want more of it.. 😊🤗 i wish i can left a more detail comments but i need a few more charpters for that.. i will be following the story for more 💪
It has an interesting premise to begin with. I love how the story is being introduced although it was a bit slow. Truthfully, i can't really review things like plot and characterization because there was only some chapters. But i'll update my review once it has enough chapters. Good Luck.
Your first chapter started off kinda slow, but I really started to pick up after chapter two. As for your character development, I would have to say that you do a really great job with the way you put a lot of depth to the MC. The only real drawback is the update frequency but that could be due to private matters or you're just busy. Which doesn't take away from your novel at all. All in all its a great novel with a ton of potential, I can't wait to read more!
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It is good. I came here after you tagged me on a thread in the forums. I can say that the story was nice. Please continue writing this gem as you continuously improve. Love it!
Wow...... I didn't expect the story will have such turn. Initial development was really cool. Writing quality can be better, And needs regular updates but man so far the world development, character design, story development was too good... So far, I loved it. 😍😍😍❤❤❤