Save State
Author: EleAxis
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What would happen if an ability to traverse time and space has been given to a quiet yet fierce individual?
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This is set in the real world. No magic or cultivation. Just a (almost) normal life of a person with strange power.
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Writing Quality: 2/5 The writing is bad, maybe try grammarly.It is very dialogue heavy and written like a script. A story needs a good balance or dialogue and descriptions. Update Stability: 5/5 I put that for everyone Story Development: 3/5 It is not bad, but I wish I could enjoy it. It would be better if there was more descriptions added. Also some stuff was confusing that I had to reread to make sure I didn't miss anything. Character Design: 3/5 Your characters are not bad, but once again I wish there was more descriptions to tell me about them. Dialogue does not give the depth of a person's feelings, motives, etc. World Background: 3/5 Your story could be a gem, I enjoy what you are making and trying to do, but once again, we come back to descriptions; there needs to be some with paragraphs and not something written like a script. You are on the right road, but maybe research more on writing or get inspired by other books while also using one of the sites that help in grammar. Keep up the good work!
I like the premise of Save State. It gives room for a lot of experimenting with different Timelines. I have only read two chapters so far but I do enjoy the concept. Problems? Make sure to edit. Swear or don't. Character Design is flat for now. Very Dialogue heavy. Maybe I will read more later but Grammer mistakes are a pet peeve of mine.