A beautiful and interesting story, I advise you to read it
Only the writer should spell more chapters
4 years ago
2
Silly_Fox
This story is very intriguing. The opening grabs your attention right away, and the nain character is a bit of an inigma.
The author just needs to brush up on her English a bit more and rely on google translate a bit less.
If they fix that, and update more regularly I am certain that this will be a five star story, hands down.
4 years ago
2
basementerz
interesting story. Even though it only has 4 chapters so far, I have a feeling that this story will only get better. I really love reading it. Keep up the good work. I hope you will update this book frequently. I'll be looking forward to seeing more chapters from you.😊
4 years ago
2
Brandongould
This is a intersting story from what has been written so far. I am intrested in what will happen next. What I say is my opion and suguestion to help your book become better so please don't take it the wrong way
Firstly for me, It was not scary. When I read Horror/Thiller books with are nomarly Steven King. I want to be right there with the MC expericing the horror and the diolage that is written now if given more details to the world and the backround to make me feel like i am there can work. The chapters that you repeated the same dilolage twice is a clever use of diloage and can be used if it is altered in such a way that it is from the other persons perpesive.
In genreal this is a good book and has the potional to be a great horror book
" If you want to be a writer, you must do two things above all others: read a lot and write a lot" Stephen King
3 years ago
1
Benny_Manatee
Pretty cool story, and I'm not too into thrillers, it's an over all interesting concept. Other than your grammatical mistakes, and poof choice of words here and there, it's a good read.
Keep up your work, and practice english a bit ;)
3 years ago
1
DaoistTxPA8K
Great story author, love the storyline and everything about this book. Keep the good work up author i rrally want to see this book at the top in tye future. Nice work author
2 years ago
0
Ice_Princesss
Great story. Has a bit of mystery in it that really piqued my interest. My only advice is that you proofread it to make sure that your grammar and spelling is correct. Once you sort that out, I believe your story will be better. Good job [img=recommend]
A beautiful and interesting story, I advise you to read it Only the writer should spell more chapters
This story is very intriguing. The opening grabs your attention right away, and the nain character is a bit of an inigma. The author just needs to brush up on her English a bit more and rely on google translate a bit less. If they fix that, and update more regularly I am certain that this will be a five star story, hands down.
interesting story. Even though it only has 4 chapters so far, I have a feeling that this story will only get better. I really love reading it. Keep up the good work. I hope you will update this book frequently. I'll be looking forward to seeing more chapters from you.😊
This is a intersting story from what has been written so far. I am intrested in what will happen next. What I say is my opion and suguestion to help your book become better so please don't take it the wrong way Firstly for me, It was not scary. When I read Horror/Thiller books with are nomarly Steven King. I want to be right there with the MC expericing the horror and the diolage that is written now if given more details to the world and the backround to make me feel like i am there can work. The chapters that you repeated the same dilolage twice is a clever use of diloage and can be used if it is altered in such a way that it is from the other persons perpesive. In genreal this is a good book and has the potional to be a great horror book " If you want to be a writer, you must do two things above all others: read a lot and write a lot" Stephen King
Pretty cool story, and I'm not too into thrillers, it's an over all interesting concept. Other than your grammatical mistakes, and poof choice of words here and there, it's a good read. Keep up your work, and practice english a bit ;)
Great story author, love the storyline and everything about this book. Keep the good work up author i rrally want to see this book at the top in tye future. Nice work author
Great story. Has a bit of mystery in it that really piqued my interest. My only advice is that you proofread it to make sure that your grammar and spelling is correct. Once you sort that out, I believe your story will be better. Good job [img=recommend]