Sans en Un Mundo Diferente (Ingles)

well ... I'm going to start with the good points, first of all I love the idea, there have been at least those that I can remember, 2 or 3 fic that had a similar theme, secondly, I think that just writing is already a very good thing and with more chapters you should start to improve, so I have expectations. Now the bad, it is basically a narrative with points of view and only 0.01% of interactions between characters, you have to improve that, there is no balance, but I trust that as time goes by there will be improvement, I like the idea. As a tip, I recommend that even if it is not very popular, you keep writing it as practice and sometime in the future when you have improved a lot, rewrite this story with the new and improved writing capabilities.

Lo único positivo que hiciste es utilizar el nombre 'Sans' y los poderes de Sans en Undertale. Lo único bueno que tienes... Para explicar resumen sería algo así: Un Otaku japonés reencarna en el cuerpo de Sans en el mundo de DXD y lo que escribiste sería mucho más creíble. Además utilizar el mundo de DXD ese anime tan japonés básico, podría ser Marvel, DC, Naruto, MHA, Una tierra normal by aún sería mejor que ese mundo aburrido y cliché. aunque solo mire el primer capítulo después del cual no pude ver más era demasiado malo.