Sub-zero in danmachi

Choji:......Strong Neji:........Very Strong Naruto:...Super Strong Madara:..Peak of Strength People who can read this ff and understand it despite its deadly grammar:..*Que One Punch OST*

I'll be blunt it's a solid idea with a good execution with everything other then the biggest part of any story grammar the grammar is so hard to understand that it takes a minute to decipher if you don't have you trusty rosetta stone to decipher these hieroglyphics then don't read that's a but of a hyperbole I'll be honest yes it's hard to read, but that doesn't mean you shouldn't continue it is good, and I'll continue because I've read worse, but yea

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Really interesting idea but executed terribly and so many cliche’s it’s not even funny If you just kept it being the mc as subzero then it Would be Cool but then you introduced scorpion which is stupid Also there’s the fact that he taught bell cryokinesis which can’t be taught The story is incredibly hard to read and overall just bad I Hope someone who Can actualy speak english and is good at grammer Could Write something similar like maybe a mortal kombat system? Where you can change to the different mortal kombat characters and have there skills,abilities and knowledge? Sounds like a dope idea i have never seen before Anyways overall this fanfic is trash and a waste of time

Ohh the grammar and the wording... its ruins this story... if only the author was better i could give this above 4.5 score. Edit: the grammar made me regret my scoring, so i lowered it even more

My god it like read a machine translation of a novel. If my nose wasn't bleeding before I started reading this, I would've thought I might have an aneurysm trying to read the story.

An amazing idea that was poorly planned and poorly executed. Not really worth a read... If you could even get through the first 2 chapters.

read the first sentence. . . . .

Grammar kills the story and it feels really rushed. no character development super short chapters its just not very good imo but the idea was solid

Scorpion appers out of nowhere.....really dude?....... so much potential wasted...............................................................

Their has only been 2 other ff/novels that made me turn away from reading it and giving it a chance before even reading the full first chapter you're the 3rd.

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with the power and EXPERIENCE of ALL subzero? the first thing I see is a chapter called training but he has the experience so what?.........