Jimmy Green had only one desire, both fleeting and impossible. Living in his brother's shadow, always resigned to be second place, he had given up on being the best. Even as he decided life of mediocrity, he just so happened to win a free copy of the game Ascension! Where magic and laws equal power, he will be Emperor. This is his ascension.
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My entry to the 2021 Spirity Awards.
Shameless self review, its not perfect but I'll be writing what I would want in a VRMMORPG. I hope you check it out.
This novel is very good ! I just read the first chapter and I already like it. especially I like the mc's personality and world background. I hope the author can update more.
Amazing story with more amazing things! Definitely worth the read! :))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
I've never really read a game genre before but this was intriguing to read, though there are a few grammar displacements, it was a good read too. There are only two chapters for now but the story's plot looks promising and interesting.
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I love how the author describes the surroundings with unique words and lets you get immersed in the story! The chapters are well-written and built up quite nicely, giving you slowly and skilfully the information about how everything works. There are a lot of VRMMORPG novels out there but I believe this one is different in both the descriptions of the world background and the character! The actions scenes are described in a masterful way without confusing you. Worth giving it a shot! :D
So far, I think your world-building is pretty cool. I like the RPG system you've picked up and the whole character customisation thing in the second chapter is also interesting to read as it gives the audience an insight on what the character's thought process and interests are like. I appreciate the element of comedy as well, the part about GOD and the abbreviation. I feel like you could add more description on your world building as well and tweak your grammar a bit in some parts. Otherwise, thank you for writing this. All the best, author :D
Wow, This story is amazing! I loved the first chapter, The fight scene and the cut to it being a commercial was a clever hook! Rpg-based novels are one of my favorite genres, so I’ll be reading this for the long run!
The story is amazing, and fresh the characters suit well with the story, the writing is good too, but there were errors like punctuation errors that were breaking the flow of sentences and some grammatical mistakes and minor typography mistakes if the author works on these he'll kill it.. Best of luck author you're doing great
Pretty good so far. The novel is in its early stages so I can't express my full view, but the way the characters are being developed, I see a great potential. BTW I really love the dialogues between characters. Keep up the good work.
Nice start interesting concept, hope you continue of in the future with great endeavour. I wonder what was that in the beginning, I hope it's expanded on.
Another video game kind of novel, I like the author's idea of letting Jimmy Green happens to win a raffle for a free copy of the game. The MC's Stat Sheet on the first chapter is also great. There was no info dump and I haven't come across to errors. Give this a read if you are into video games kind of novels
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I only have one word for this novel, one word only. Are you curious about my one word too? Why so curious? Stop reading to find out my one word man. Omg, please stop being so curious. Curiosity will kill the cat, don't you know this. Fine, seeing how you're so desperate to know my one word. It's collection. What's collection? Obviously, it's adding this novel to your library fool.