Past The Marigold Meadow

Author here to provide more insight: The story is centered around a dark-thriller theme based in a fantasy world. As a style of mine, I like to put many, but not too much foreshadows and clues in the story, so if you’re interested in analysing and theorising how a story will go, this one would be for you. Thank you and enjoy!

Its a pity there isn't many chapters to fo off of but its really well written! The author does a great job of introducing the characters & the world background. Highly recommend this as a read!

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Is it only me or it actually felt like i was ready an actual published novel? I loved your descriptions and characters development.It felt like the scenes was playing out right on my screen. That’s awesome. You’re really talented, authour. Keep up the good work 👍👍

Although I haven't read much, I have to say, author-sans writing immediately absorbs you into the already intriguing story. I can't wait to see how the story develops and how the author will further refine his/her talent. I mean just read the first paragraph if you're still hesitating, you won't regret it :)

I don't give out five stars to just anybody. but this novel deserves six to be honest. I'm not good at reviews but I have to say the writing quality is that of a professional; I almost felt as if I was reading a novel published by someone already famous. the story itself is excellent, with small things here and there to add to the mystery. the characters I already fell in love with the minute I met them. as I read this story, I really felt like I was there, making them more life like. so if you're looking for a book with an author that knows what their doing, look no further. please, please, please, please, please, please, PLEASE, give this novel a chance. you'll be hooked by chapter one.

I love how you portray your writing! The writing is neat which has been my top priority whenever I start reading books as the messy ones would kind of distract me from my attention You just have six chapters so far so I couldn't comment much on the storyline. Nevertheless, don't give up and keep writing!

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The author did a great job writing the characters and the world background. It's pretty interesting. The synopsis gave me a dark vibes and it's pretty written well. There is not much chapters here so I can't really say more about it.

I'm good with the stability of updates, character design, and world background. Writing quality is good but there are some mishaps here and there. Example: - Singular instead of plural: There are two characters in a sentence. At some point you use "Who's" instead or "who are" - Overuse of strong adjectives: Dash and darted in the same sentence only separated by four or five words. It can exist, but in that particular sentence it didn't match and was confusing. Story development: That's a personal issue. It's just too slow for me. However, overall, I think it's a fine novel.

9 chapters and it got me hooked! What I enjoyed most is your writing style! It is really awesome! Will be waiting for your next updates and also good luck with the contest❤

The story has great potential. Your writing quality deserves praise. Just keep writing and don't drop it. Like it a lot! I want to see more of the good work!

REVIEW Narration: Decent and immersive Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed Character development: Nice and steady Character design: Outstanding Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike Pacing: Not fast nor too slow Writing quality: Magnificent Execution of the Genre: Good pitch Story potential: High Updating Stability: Steady MESSAGE I am deeply happy that the author joined spirity. As it has the potential to win! With more exposure, this will become great and even reach a million views! Or anime adaptation even a movie! Kudos on your work and See you in December (if you know what I mean) 😉

The use of language is nice – quite polished and well edited. Adding the good job done with descriptions, it is pretty easy for a reader to imagine what is happening there, behind these symbols. Interesting and intriguing start, and I like these clues and foreshadowing things. It’s nice when your theories come out to be right, or sometimes completely wrong, but gives you a feeling like “Oh my god how could I miss that?” Anyway, good job and Keep it up!