The Impurity's Ascension
congrats to the admissions officer coming here from my application (Kenneth W., Arizona)
I wrote this 260,000 word webnovel over the span of almost three years as a passion project of mine. Click to expand description ---->
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The apocalypse was here, reaping billions of lives across the world. The details of its creation, whether by machine, man, or nature, were forgotten amid the chaos. Humanity never returned to what it was, instead evolving to withstand their new reality. The strongest of this harsh era began to consolidate their strength again, creating pockets of sprawling civilization amid the wastelands.
Only one civilization remained at the end of it all: a dense mound of urban sprawl known only as the City.
It was the last bastion of civilization, and it was a living hell.
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In this world, a boy without memories found himself in an alleyway stained with rot. Unfamiliar sights and sensations assaulted him. Smoke stung his nose. The stench of blood crawled on his skin.
He saw his future ahead, a path of cunning and brutality:
Three expressionless porcelain masks.
An empty smile, glassy doll eyes.
Millions of eyes sewn into the night, dazzling galaxies.
So many stars lit the sky, blinding his view. These were the obstacles he had to surpass, to tear from their thrones.
And so began the Impurity's Ascension.
An isekai with death leading to brutal penalties followed by a "re-load" back in time. Heavy focus on gore: if that's your thing, you'll find enjoyment here. After the first chapter, the writing quality picks up. Chapter one was hard to follow as the dialogue isn't tagged, there are too many unknown characters, and the scene has no context. However, once the second chapter hits, the scenes have flow, and the characters have both motivations and context. As of chapter seven, there doesn't seem to be a clear "main goal" beyond "complete quests to level up, and level up to complete quests." However, there are indications of larger powers at play.
If you want a grimdark apocalyptic story then this is the best you'll read. It's got magic, it's got eldritch horrors, it's got far future technology. This should be picked up by a publishing company, it's that good. The characters are raw and emotional, the settng is enthralling, and the story is addictive! I cannot stop reading it!
Seems alright so far, but although its an interesting world it doesn't seem very fleshed out so far, you might want to explain the inner workings of his society more. ill just save this until you get more chaps :)
Seeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemmmmmmmmmssssssssssssssss GOOD
This author either loves writing or hates work/studying and I cannot tell which. You've got something great going here, but maybe try to focus more on the world than the characters. Fabulous so far, don't abandon this please!
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So interesting idea with fascinating plot. Love the way you started the story. It seemed much unqiue from other stories. Looking forward to get more and more.
I love this travel back in time plot, it reminds me of Mother of learning. But I confess that I can't help hopping to see the MC dies, I liked the interactions with the systems, it provides useful information and world background building. Looking forward for more chapters.
You legit added a chapter as i was reading it. i was pleasantly surprised to find that there was one more than twenty. 5/5 just dont drop it
Story: Great, good worldbuilding, nice concept Development: Good, MC actually loses sometimes, side characters have their own lives and personality. World Background: I'm pretty sure the concept of Fixers, Urban Myths, Urban Legends, Urban Plagues, the whole ranking system, and some of the factions are based off of Library of Ruina, a video game.
I feel like this is a good story detailing the life of a person living in The City and his struggles. Also implementing many elements from Library of Ruina or Lobotomy Corporation like the characters from the former and the abnormalities from the latter. Well done. Not perfect but well done.
after playing the 2 games from project moon, im really happy for finding a book about the same universe, even if you didnt played the game, you can still enjoy the story, really liked the characters and how the creator always adds something special for all of them, update of every 3 days is more than fine by how good it is, and that's it OBS: Im not a specialist, this is just my opinion, i can be really wrong(but i dont think i would be so wrong); 2- english isnt my first language, so sorry for killing your language;-;.
It's good. The City is a good setting. Even though this is pretty much an AU it's still coherent enough to get most of the elements that make it interesting in. The protagonist is a good character, though very notably not OP. It's not as bad a situation as in Re:zero, but even having a gamer system doesn't make him seem too powerful.
The story and writing is great. It's just that the justice seeking MC that saves everyone and trys to fix things is not my cup of tea. I like MC who rather think about their own survival and power up, like fang yuan from Reverend insanity.
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