You should write more on this novel but also make the academy volume a lot longer don’t do any time skips as there’s a lot of stuff you can do with this part of the story such as internationals, tournament training this would be relevant further down the line of the story. But above all this novel is good keep going.
3 years ago
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ediushshshs599_1
writing quality: your writing is kinda boring, goody two shoes styled. there's no emotions or personality portrayed leading to one dimensional characters and world. You need to add personlity to it.
story development: it's decent.
character design: well there's none.
world background: same old earth with undetailed background near the mc.
You should write more on this novel but also make the academy volume a lot longer don’t do any time skips as there’s a lot of stuff you can do with this part of the story such as internationals, tournament training this would be relevant further down the line of the story. But above all this novel is good keep going.
writing quality: your writing is kinda boring, goody two shoes styled. there's no emotions or personality portrayed leading to one dimensional characters and world. You need to add personlity to it. story development: it's decent. character design: well there's none. world background: same old earth with undetailed background near the mc.