Tokyo ghoul : Fanfiction

Hello , everyone I'm a new writer and dabbling my hands-on writing fanfiction this here would be my first attempt at it, Hopefully, I'll improve along the way and would be able to make the story better. Try reading if you have nothing else to read or if you're interested in seeing the world of Tokyo ghoul from a different perspective. That's all I"ll be saying, Have a nice day.

the story is decent, good grammar, but the MC is heavily flawed. Not in the human way but just written poorly. no moral code, nothing to really appreciate , respect, or like about him. he has a weird fetish with flesh and describing it which sometimes overshadows everything else, even the plot. I'd be concerned for the writers mentality if the trend continues but I suspect it's some failed attempt at a ghouls perspective.

God, it's amazing how a good story can be ruined by a forced plot. You started off well, but that's all.................................................

Written well, while a little silly. The author simply didn’t read the manga, so he comes to a lot of conclusions going directly against cannon (and the pseudo science invented by the author to explain things.) He basically does whatever he wants, ignores the IP, any butterfly effects it should have caused, and his characters actions/motivations are all over the place. Basically the author is having fun, which isn’t to say the story is inherently bad, I just couldn’t stand reading it anymore thanks to the increasing number of inconsistencies. If none of what I’ve listed bothers you, give it a try, maybe you’ll like it.

This is good please make more I love where this is going and its not hard to read so i enjoyed it a lot,also i hope he ends up fighting eto or maybe making her hos girlfriend just saying and i hope he ends up fighting Rize since she didnt die.

At first it was very good but… when eto was came in the story, well it just went down and down, if I were you author I’d Delete the chapters with eto and continue from there!

At the start it was okay, but the later chapters really killed the story. Things just stopped making sense, and the fic burned due to that fact.

only thing I can say is that it really is slow and boring, in an interesting way of course. I noticed a few thing other that that but im to lazy to elaborate.

so many laps to become a ghoul, that is why he was reincarnated just when canequi wakes up after the operation, leaving this behind. ...............................

So I've read till latest chapters and here's my honest review Writing quality: Quality is excellent, no grammar errors, no difficult and presentation is good. Maybe once in a while you'll see a little typo but that's ok Updating stability: my only issue is this. Inconsistent, not that I'm saying you are not updating but it is inconsistent. Or maybe don't upload for a week or two then mass release as you yourself know that them chapters aren't the longest. Story development: it is actually very unique and has a lot of potential. Mc get reincarnated in tokyo but did not go the canon way. Mc also not as pathetic as og kaneki. He is very likeable except for his lack brain mode sometimes. Character design: look dawg, this is a fanfic which means you already read or watch Tokyo ghoul. Even so, author actually give them more personality which is very agreeable. World background: same as above but can be improved further like a lil bit of more description otherwise everything good Overall: This is a very good fanfiction imho, i really recommend it if you love Tokyo ghoul and not see a pathetic kaneki which is a nice thing imo. Don't really remember if you have patreon, if so, ik you need money but look out for us poor readers as well, not asking for 2 chap a day but yk just be consistent bro. Also keep it up, good novel more chap and it'll be surely popular

complete and utter TRASH brings shame on the original. Worst fanfic I've seen yet .......... . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . .

well, the writing is really good and the emotions are a little noticeable, which is very good compared to the other fan fiction on the site.

1. MC decline rize offer to go on a walk with her (aka easy access to being a very powerful half-ghoul) and instead decides to risk it on a surgery that probably had a 1% chance of working from a crazy ex CCG member 2. MC has a creep/stalker level of fascination of Touka 3. Author is an edge lord 4. MC decides to pick up smoking because he thought it was cool 💀 5. MC buys a mask from the mask dealer guy (uta??) and thought that GIVING THEM HIS ADDRESS FOR THEM TO DELIVER THE MASK was a smart idea 6. MC lets in some random girl because she reminded him of his dead cousin (aka author forced plot for stupid reason and ruined their stuff) Tl;dr MC and author are both edge lords that have 0 sense of survival or brain cells

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