◇Dark Souls◇

Hey, Author here! I humbly thank each one of you for reading ◇Dark Souls◇! It's been a dream project of mine for quite a few years. I started coming up with the story back in high school and gradually developed it inside my head over the years. Since I plan to adapt this novel into a manga in the future, my writing style obviously doesn't go into the book style direction but more into the webnovel style. I hope you won't mind it too much. I'm an absolute beginner writer, I have seriously never written anything before and tbh I was scared to start this at first, but we all gotta jump into the cold water sometimes right?! Well anyways, I'm greatful for everyone's Feedback so far! I tried to adapt it into my novel and I hope the improvement shows. Thanks to my Editor ,I got a better understanding of Word building and grammar ,which helped me implement Story aspects better. Thanks to him the grammar also gradually improved! I've edited the first 3 chapters which were not grammar checked yet and also added some things here and there, to fit the rest of the story better. Thanks to everyones feedback so far I had a good chance on learning and I'm greatful for that so thank you everyone!♡ Now if you've read this novel and enjoyed the story ,please leave a Review and lmk what you think! It would be my pleasure to hear about your thoughts ! now have a cookie and see you again! 💕👀 *gibs cookie*

The strong point of this was its complex plot. Accompanied with good character interactions and character design were no cardboard cutouts. Story direction was also one thing that makes the readers on their toes to read. The downside was it has to be handled with an editor. Maybe the quality will be better that way. Anyways, this is still one of the best when it comes to plot out there. Good job!

Although there are small areas in each chapter the author could add more descriptions, the best thing about the book is the tone. For the first time, there is an author who writes with tone and mood. The story carries a mysterious, dark, and foreshadowing tone that really fits the genre. This book deserves a big 5 star 🌟!!!

For chapter two is quite short and yet so interesting. I love it, and the mysterious vibe it gave off. And the setting of the story is so good. The writing and the pace of the story are normal but it's alright since the plot was great.

At first, I thought it was a normal story and when I saw that she teleport with a bunny I thought, it was some Alice in wonderland story huh... but what horror after on 2 chapters its really a good twist The writing is really smooth, I had already added it to library and I will read it when I have time,

I really like the book.the beginning was a little dull but it got better and better. There was the occasional grammar mistakes but what author doesn't have those. I got a little caught off guard by the change in perspective but I later got used to it. The description at the beginning also was a little lacking at the beginning but I think later in the book you improved. Overall it was such a nice book and it is the kind of book I would gladly wait for an update (that's a good thing because I am a very impatient person)

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This is a different kind of story for once and a good read for everyone, that looks for something new. 10/10 recommend Character design super nice, I can vividly imagine them actually. Plot is logical as well, though at first you aren't quite sure what's going on, but you soon get the hang of it all, as things get explained well. Writing shows the author is still learning but it doesn't bother too much. Overall rating 5

I like the concept and where the author is going with this, but the only slight issue I have with it is grammar. Not that it's too bad but some things aren't quite worded right and some punctuations are misplaced. Other than that, 👍