writing level not reached yet, yo hope you loved the story it's my first one on this website. if you did keep loving it and if you didn't feel free to write all the negative comments you want. Trust me I love them 😘
4 years ago
0
LazyHumor
As everyone said, it has a lot of potential to grow. Tiny errors in the story but its good and one i will definetely read. Someone dying already also pacing eh but im sure you know where you want your story to go. Can't wait to see what happens next.
4 years ago
2
Devin1
The story definitely has a lot of potential to grow. There is a bit of errors in the story but overall, its good. Can't wait to see what happens next :)
4 years ago
2
SteamyWriter
The story definitely has a lot of potential to grow and become something purely awesome! I recommend anyone to stick through and see how this story develops!
4 years ago
2
HarleyApproves
I can't wait for the next chapter. I'm not usually one to read fiction and stuff like these... but yours seems totally worth it. Update please.
4 years ago
1
Kota_Sama
I'll admit it's definitely got potential and actually was really good despite only having one chapter so far. I look forward to more chapters in the future.
Keep up the chapters Author :3
3 years ago
0
Xinbai_Tai
The story has potential, but there is just too much dialogue. There is a lack of world-building, the power phenomenon isn't explained clear yet.
3 years ago
0
PhantomWriterX
I am loving this story already and it's only the first chapter! Although there were a few mistakes and errors, they can all be easily fixed. I am looking forward to more updates, and keep up the good work!
writing level not reached yet, yo hope you loved the story it's my first one on this website. if you did keep loving it and if you didn't feel free to write all the negative comments you want. Trust me I love them 😘
As everyone said, it has a lot of potential to grow. Tiny errors in the story but its good and one i will definetely read. Someone dying already also pacing eh but im sure you know where you want your story to go. Can't wait to see what happens next.
The story definitely has a lot of potential to grow. There is a bit of errors in the story but overall, its good. Can't wait to see what happens next :)
The story definitely has a lot of potential to grow and become something purely awesome! I recommend anyone to stick through and see how this story develops!
I can't wait for the next chapter. I'm not usually one to read fiction and stuff like these... but yours seems totally worth it. Update please.
I'll admit it's definitely got potential and actually was really good despite only having one chapter so far. I look forward to more chapters in the future. Keep up the chapters Author :3
The story has potential, but there is just too much dialogue. There is a lack of world-building, the power phenomenon isn't explained clear yet.
I am loving this story already and it's only the first chapter! Although there were a few mistakes and errors, they can all be easily fixed. I am looking forward to more updates, and keep up the good work!