Strike The Sun!

What a revolutionary idea! The thoughts of creating such a masterpiece! I must say this has potential and I enjoyed my time reading this. The flow and sentence structure is on point. I must say I didn't stutter at all! I am hoping to see this novel last till its end. This is good! So keep writing! You got enormous potential!

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The characters are well-written and world design is great. Some issues I would focus on is the character texts could use slightly better formatting and the tempo of revealing information. This is just my personal preferance, when you talked about the mutations that occurred from the sun I think revealing that humans have also developed powers in chapter one serves the story's pacing better. You can add more information like how it might be very rare to occur, and then Allen managing to develop one is like winning a lottery or something. I think also telling how Allen plans to destroy the sun, aside from having flame powers, should also be elaborated in chapter 2. It's just my view on it though, the story overall is still written well.

I like the idea... it's captivating...world-building and the plot are nice.. the charactors development is good...though I feel it would be more enjoyable if things move a little faster...

I'm not familiar with giving book reviews but here it goes. The story is interesting and entertaining, the events are somewhat new to me and that makes me curious on how the story will go. The last chapter feels like a cliffhanger, for me that is. The narration is smooth, not too complicated nor to vague and it's not confusing. It's a great story.

A good and unique story with a pretty interesting plot. I also like some of the characters. I'm really looking forward to the continuation. Hopefully it doesn't stop halfway. I'm sure your story will be a success, I'm looking forward to it!

I'm liking the premise, though I feel that a lot more descriptions could be added. This is a very different world from the one we live in, so why not describe the superpowers in more detail? Also, it's personally hard for me to imagine that the MC is 25-years-old given the thinking that we've been exposed to, but perhaps this will be explained later. I am enjoying the story so far, a lot of things are happening, which is nice.

Really like how the author wrote the story using a new approach. The story highlights the characters fully. Although there are some things not explained fully. It has great potential to be a good novel. Looking forward to it.

Hello Author here. Please do try out this novel. I try to improve my writing style as I upload further and further. So don't hesitate to comment if you do find some corrections.. Fun fact: if you read the title phonetically, it might sound like "Stryka-san!" So perhaps this is a story about Mr. Stryka all along...