NICOLE (#1 Broken) 1st Draft
"I Damien Jayden Ross reject you Nicole Ava Jacobs as my mate and luna, you're undeserving and unworthy to be my mate. And don't you dare say a word about this to anyone"Damien said.
"I Nicole Ava Jacobs accept your rejection Alpha Damien Jayden Ross Alpha of Bright moon pack," I said in a low voice which shocked him.
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[Full book on wattpad]
She escaped, she was finally free but what happens when she trespasses into the most feared pack of all time?
With all hopes lost and her trying to forget the mate that rejected her, what happens when she finds out she has another mate, not one but two?
With the rumors, Alex and Asher don't have much hope of finding their mate but destiny has another plan for them.
They're broken
They need fixing
She's gifted but she doesn't know it
She's destined to save the world of the supernaturals.
Will, she succeed? Will they heal each other? Will she trust the right people to get things done or not? Will she make the right decision? will she survive?
First in the BROKEN series
BROKEN Series
NICOLE
HER BROKEN BETA
Mate's with the Devil
All books can be read as a stand-alone book
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Idk about you but I suck at descriptions and just hope you find this book enjoyable.
All ideas are mine and this is a work of my "IMAGINATION "
This is my first book on Wattpad and webnovel like ever created.
Thanks for reading
-Vee
Five star ?why not, I kinda put a lot of work in this and might edit later cos of some likely grammatical errors if there is tho. The FL was bullied all at first but there's a twist . Our MLS yep you heard me they're two main ml and they're brother's they're also super possessive there's lots of drama and abit of magic yep. that's it
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I'll be honest, the story is captivating! But there are some tweaks here or there... *Just saying. No spacing in the first chapter... It made me kind of cringe when I was reading it. Honestly I wanted to drop reading it because I was uncomfortable seeing words joined together with no paragraph. And how you explained the flashback scene was kind of... Confusing? I know you're just starting out and that you've taken a big step into the world of authors. I'll definitely add this to my library to watch how you develop your writing and your backstories... I feel sorry for the she-wolf though.😭
Okay darling, the synopsis kind of needs more attention to be catchy, hey that's just my opinion. I like werewolves, I am sure there is a lot of jealousy and rivalry, i am so in. Let me dig in, I'll give out comments chapter-wise.
The author should use the auxiliary chapter for explanation or character introduction. It will be a convenience for readers if the webnovel has a neat arrangement of chapters. The use of capital letters in certain sections is also important. The writing is messed up. Sometimes there is a space before the comma. In terms of the story, I quite enjoyed it but the unusual writing style really made me feel bad. I thought, the writer needs to read one chapter of the top novel then use it as a guide for writing.
Author, you are going good, the story plot is good and interesting, made me feel sorry for the MC, and hope she takes her revenge, keeps up the good work author.
This large, specific and varied list of characters and their characteristics... powers. -Respond to-: What will she/they do to survive? The author of the book already says it in its first chapters: Pay attention to the titles: ~PROLOGUE~ ~REALITY~ DENIAL REJECTION FREEDOM Rouge... I have enjoyed annotating, and highlighting in comments how well the novel is structured. And since I am going to read for weeks, I will continue tomorrow with other chapters.
The writing quality is quite nice. Didn't notice many grammatical errors. However, the first two chapters seemed unnecessary. Too much information might stop readers from progressing further. The storytelling seemed like an one person dialogue. It can be done better by adding more characters interactions and history. It has a rich plot, so as long as the way of storytelling is improved I am sure it will receive the attention it deserves.
Amazing irregular novel! Never read one like this one, try to seperate the paragraphs more though, even so, solid novel. Very interesting start as well.
This book has everything you could ask for, I mean the author even took her time to explain to us every character. That is so wonderful, I hope the author can keep updating so that we can read more
The story is pretty interesting, although I did see some grammar mistakes also could you shorten the long paragraphs it was really difficult to read because of that overall novel is great!
Nice and interesting story...Never saw a stroy that have not only one but two chance mate and even twins😂....( As l am also one of a twin, l can say there gonna be a lot of drama l guess.) Instead of the grammar mistake everything is nice and fresh..... So all the very best and keep updating us☺️...
Okay, here are some things you might wanna fix is your grammar, because it makes it hard to read and actually understand. Fix those and your book will have better content.
It took me awhile to read this all. Had to go back and fort to understand each moment. The story is good, but the writhing needs a few adjustments. Then there another thing that picked up my interest and was the multiple ways of the narrative going back and fort from third person to first person and it becomes too confusing from time to time. But aside from that, the story was great so far as I could tell.