harem? no harem? i need to know so i can set my expectation.
2 years ago
22
ThePpp_Pppp
I will gladly appreciate any criticism that helps me get better.
2 years ago
21
Dennis0Ribeiro
He dosen't have personality, memory of a goldfish is a understatement, character development is nonexistent.
2 years ago
12
Charlotte_Mage
pretty good and I do hope there is a Harem but make it max 5 girls
2 years ago
5
Austin_oates
The book was good at first with minor gramor and spelling errors that are expected of a fanfic, but around chapter 20, it got super confusing. I couldn't tell the timeline, and I felt the girl he took in personality was all over the place. Sometimes, she was a traumatized girl who feared being apart for 2 seconds and could not bathe without constantly checking if hes there outside the door. Sometimes, she doesn't even greet him when he returns and goes straight to her room, acting like a normal kid. Her personality is not consistent. I also don't like how you do the recap at the beginning of every chapter I don't know how it is for other people but I'd I want to looked at the last chapter I just scroll up so it's annoying,but that's just my personal preference. Lastly, I don't know how I feel about him passing out and getting memories of another past life. I mean, all thats done for me is make the plot less enjoyable and more confusing.
a year ago
4
DaoistOfeOTA
Iirc author makes the mc have a ntr flashback of ymir getting banged in front of him and I dropped after so couldn’t tell you more
7 months ago
3
ANANTA
1. Writing- Good and still improving.
2. i. Please no harem,
ii. Leave Mikasa for Eren, make a good ending, not like the original.
3. It's good but i hope MC become *MASTER OF ALL*
Archetype:Master of All
ALL INCARNATIONS OF THE AVATAR (AVATAR: THE LAST AIRBENDER) CAN BEND ALL FOUR ELEMENTS, AND LEARN MORE ESOTERIC SKILLS LIKE HEALING AND METALBENDING.
THE ARCHETYPE OF: The ace/master of all.
The power to embody the "master of all" archetype. Advanced/Ultimate version of All-Rounder and Jack-of-All-Stats.
Also Called:
• The Ace
Properties: The user is the "master of all", excelling at virtually everything to the extent that specialists are virtually redundant. They can pick up new skills with ease and intuitively understand whatever they need to. Unlike its lower versions, this archetype is not simply good in all areas or balanced between them, but rather one of the best, if not, the best in all areas.
Powers-
• Ability Transcendence
• Accelerated Development
• Instant Learning
• All-Rounder
• Polymath
• Genius
• Genius Bruiser
• Combat Pragmatist
• Combat Specialism
• Power Specialism
• Lightning Bruiser - Absolute Level
• Powerhouse
• Speedster
• Meta-Learning
• Omni Mode
• Omni-Element Manipulation
• Omnicompetence
• Infinite Experience
• Omni-Intuition
• Omni-Mastery
• Omni Profession
• Optimal Finesse
• Path to Victory
• Path Maker
• Path Killer
• Power Balance
• Reactive Adaptation; in some cases, the user adapts to gain the skills or power needs for any one situation.
• Setup Fighter
• Talent Embodiment
• Tactical Genius
• Training Regimen
Relationships
• All-Rounder
• Child Prodigy
• Polymath
• Power-Skill Combo
4. 3 Chapters per week is good.
5. World- Make the strory cover everything in the world countries - Hizuru (Asia), Acimera, Marley, Mid-East, Eldia (Paradis), Aidini, Ainaeco.
2 years ago
3
Lagash
I am extremely disappointed.
1/4 of the chapter are repites.
He dosen't have personality, memory of a goldfish is a understatement, character development is nonexistent.
a year ago
2
GodOfLight
He dosen't have personality, memory of a goldfish is a understatement, character development is nonexistent.
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a year ago
2
TheOneBelow
To be honest im lost I dont even know what the frick is happening, so ima just rate it base on how I feel. Try to read it but dont get your hopes up. Good luck on the novel!🎊
a year ago
2
Argent_ASNC
I am extremely disappointed.
I do not understand authors who endow their character with such power, where there is no smell of such power.
I have read 4 chapters. Well, why does the character need such power in Attack on Titan?!
why not choose something like: infinite stamina, luck, ackerman physique, brain boost, or at least hacks.
because the "avatar" elements don't fit into the world of Attack on Titan. it makes the character stand out too much.
they will want to kill him or they will work tirelessly. in the future he will have people who are dear to him and there is no turning back.
stand out with such force in such a world of suicide. so this story is meaningless.
2 years ago
2
esperomejorar
recien empezare a leer, pero le dare 4 estrellas a todo por ahora.
2 years ago
2
NeaCambelt
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a year ago
1
Nitish_kumar_2678
it's really bad the author has ntr fetish and the mc has a memory of a goldfish.
No harem please?
harem? no harem? i need to know so i can set my expectation.
I will gladly appreciate any criticism that helps me get better.
He dosen't have personality, memory of a goldfish is a understatement, character development is nonexistent.
pretty good and I do hope there is a Harem but make it max 5 girls
The book was good at first with minor gramor and spelling errors that are expected of a fanfic, but around chapter 20, it got super confusing. I couldn't tell the timeline, and I felt the girl he took in personality was all over the place. Sometimes, she was a traumatized girl who feared being apart for 2 seconds and could not bathe without constantly checking if hes there outside the door. Sometimes, she doesn't even greet him when he returns and goes straight to her room, acting like a normal kid. Her personality is not consistent. I also don't like how you do the recap at the beginning of every chapter I don't know how it is for other people but I'd I want to looked at the last chapter I just scroll up so it's annoying,but that's just my personal preference. Lastly, I don't know how I feel about him passing out and getting memories of another past life. I mean, all thats done for me is make the plot less enjoyable and more confusing.
Iirc author makes the mc have a ntr flashback of ymir getting banged in front of him and I dropped after so couldn’t tell you more
1. Writing- Good and still improving. 2. i. Please no harem, ii. Leave Mikasa for Eren, make a good ending, not like the original. 3. It's good but i hope MC become *MASTER OF ALL* Archetype:Master of All ALL INCARNATIONS OF THE AVATAR (AVATAR: THE LAST AIRBENDER) CAN BEND ALL FOUR ELEMENTS, AND LEARN MORE ESOTERIC SKILLS LIKE HEALING AND METALBENDING. THE ARCHETYPE OF: The ace/master of all. The power to embody the "master of all" archetype. Advanced/Ultimate version of All-Rounder and Jack-of-All-Stats. Also Called: • The Ace Properties: The user is the "master of all", excelling at virtually everything to the extent that specialists are virtually redundant. They can pick up new skills with ease and intuitively understand whatever they need to. Unlike its lower versions, this archetype is not simply good in all areas or balanced between them, but rather one of the best, if not, the best in all areas. Powers- • Ability Transcendence • Accelerated Development • Instant Learning • All-Rounder • Polymath • Genius • Genius Bruiser • Combat Pragmatist • Combat Specialism • Power Specialism • Lightning Bruiser - Absolute Level • Powerhouse • Speedster • Meta-Learning • Omni Mode • Omni-Element Manipulation • Omnicompetence • Infinite Experience • Omni-Intuition • Omni-Mastery • Omni Profession • Optimal Finesse • Path to Victory • Path Maker • Path Killer • Power Balance • Reactive Adaptation; in some cases, the user adapts to gain the skills or power needs for any one situation. • Setup Fighter • Talent Embodiment • Tactical Genius • Training Regimen Relationships • All-Rounder • Child Prodigy • Polymath • Power-Skill Combo 4. 3 Chapters per week is good. 5. World- Make the strory cover everything in the world countries - Hizuru (Asia), Acimera, Marley, Mid-East, Eldia (Paradis), Aidini, Ainaeco.
I am extremely disappointed. 1/4 of the chapter are repites. He dosen't have personality, memory of a goldfish is a understatement, character development is nonexistent.
He dosen't have personality, memory of a goldfish is a understatement, character development is nonexistent. .
To be honest im lost I dont even know what the frick is happening, so ima just rate it base on how I feel. Try to read it but dont get your hopes up. Good luck on the novel!🎊
I am extremely disappointed. I do not understand authors who endow their character with such power, where there is no smell of such power. I have read 4 chapters. Well, why does the character need such power in Attack on Titan?! why not choose something like: infinite stamina, luck, ackerman physique, brain boost, or at least hacks. because the "avatar" elements don't fit into the world of Attack on Titan. it makes the character stand out too much. they will want to kill him or they will work tirelessly. in the future he will have people who are dear to him and there is no turning back. stand out with such force in such a world of suicide. so this story is meaningless.
recien empezare a leer, pero le dare 4 estrellas a todo por ahora.
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it's really bad the author has ntr fetish and the mc has a memory of a goldfish.