The Mysterious House
Set in a dystopian America in the near future, the story tells of the experiences of five 16-year-olds who were living in orphanages who wake up to find themselves in a strange building that has no walls, no ceiling, and no floor: nothing but endless flights of stairs leading in every direction, seemingly infinite, so that it is impossible to get one's bearings or have perspective. On one landing is a basin of running water that serves as a toilet, sink and drinking fountain; on another, a machine with lights that intermittently produces food. The five, thrown together in these bizarre circumstances, must learn to deal with the others' disparate personalities, the lack of privacy and comfort, their clear helplessness, and a machine that only feeds them under gradually more exacting situations.
It's really great to see something different in webnovels, I don't really know if I have seen this kind of storyline here. Well, that's that all I wanna say is, you could breakdown the paragraph that would be much better. lol. great work. Happy reading peeps!
This story is still in its infancy but the writer can turn this into another bestseller if more effort is put into updating regular, editing and more character and world building. I enjoyed what I read so far and encourage others to give it a try, good job writer can't wait to see what's coming next[img=update]
Goodstory, definitely different from what ive seen before. i just hope it doesnt devolve into every psychological thriller where they just rely on character tropes, rather than developing their personalites as the story moves forward. You write well, but i must say, the paragraphs are just wayyy too long. You need to learn how to section stuff off. it just provides a better reading experience. also never have 2 different sets of dialogue in the same paragraph. its really confusing. overall it was a pretty good read, would recommend, Keep writing ✍️
Overall the story reads very smoothly with good flow and structure. In particular, the I enjoyed how the author switches POV around the different characters offering a wide range of unique perspectives. Criticism-wise there isn't much to say, the only issue I really noticed was that the grammar (mainly punctuation) was off occasionally, which in my opinion is something incredibly minor and easy to fix. Overall its a good read for a mystery novel, one that draws the reader with its descriptive language and engaging plot.
The symbiosis itself freaks you out. The story is great. Full of amazing plots and plans. I am too excited to see where it shall go. Excellent story
I AM LOOKING FORWARD TO READ THE NEXT SERIES IN DIFFERENT GENRE
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I love a good mystery story. And this one started well. The Synopsis keeps one on the edge and makes you want to read more. You have a lot of work ahead, please kindly update.
Liked the first chapter as I love to read mysterious novel so this one was exactly of my taste, the setting is well described, keep writing
The grammar is very very good. The story so far seems interesting, i will surely add to collection. I don't know for the frequency of updated, tho.