(GOT/ASOIAF) The Emperor
How would you feel when your miserable life would end? Would you feel sad? Or angry, or maybe you would feel happy because God gives you another chance at a new life in your favorite universe, "A Song of Ice and Fire."
The main character (MC) is no longer human, so don't hope that he will follow their rules and laws.
MC's messed-up mind cares little about anything other than his own interests, beautiful women, conquest, and power.
He is evil in his way, ready to throw a baby in the fire if it benefits him.
As I said, his life, his rules, so if he thinks he will get women fastest by forcing himself on them, then he would do it. Yes, he would r@pe if he needs to do it. But as I said, it's a last ditch effort.
So, if you don't like it, you can leave now, there are no strings attached to him to hold him back.
Yes, it's a harem, but a slow one with the best women of the worlds.
I don't know much about GOT, so suggestions are welcome.
Criticism is welcome, but to a limit, don't overdo it.
This is a story where the protagonist's mental monologue occupies more than 90% of the chapters. The interaction and conversation with other characters is minimal, being overshadowed by the unnecessary dumping of information or the protagonist's mental monologue. I thought the story would be about building a kingdom or country, unfortunate this is about the beautiful protagonist and how feminine her face is. Something absurd, which causes cringe or annoyance, is that since he was a baby the protagonist has his priority for 'his women' and what he will do to help them.
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The mc is given far too much power and is completely overpowered as a child. As in cultivating elemental control of space, time, soul, reality, mind etc. Alot of his feats aren't properly explained either. like how on earth can he do that. Real problem is his birth period, it's fine to do pre-canon but then trying to preserve some parts of the canon and invalidate others isn't working. Not truly bad by any means, the mc just needs to be heavily nerfed and maybe be born later.
this ff has/had potential, and I was excited to read based on the concept, but the delivery is poor. simple things like grammar and punctuation can be ignored, but there are issues beyond the little mistakes that make this hard to read. continuity gets screwy with character interactions. constantly messes up character names and pov is all sorts of convoluted. (though that does get a little better the more you go on) paragraph long explanations of things totally unrelated to the story or character, to never be mentioned again, that ruins immersion. and more but that's the stuff you notice quickly. this work seems like most chapters weren't proofread and the author is rushing through their work. However, if the author rewrote this, I'd give it a chance because, again, the concept is great. but this draft needs work.
The grammar is just wrong, the MC practically only talks in his mind, paragraphs are missing and everything is too slow.
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Interesting and fun, the MC is OP so that's that. And the grammar is way better then your previous stories. keep up the good work.
sorry bro, can't be more. Just read four chapters and I've had enough of your MCs, sociopath , psychopath and sadistic....those are complete words to describe your MC.
It’s just plagiarised garbage nothing more
Yes, can't wait for more its a great story and I love it [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
It's the author here following the law by giving myself a five star
I think a lot of the dialogue from your story is the same as other stories, where the main character's name is Edward, and also the main character comes from the Baratheon family and is even Robert's twin, I mean isn't this the same as you stealing someone else's work??
Never going to give you up never going to let you down
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what is this bulls#it. i tried to read but man its hard