It's interesting, but the internal dialogues and monologues are very childish, even the development of the story itself. I hope that over time you will improve those not so mature aspects. Luck!
a year ago
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Jester_Advocate
the idea is good but very bad on the execution also hope you remove harems as its one of if not the hardest to use as a novel standpoint like many harems here are trash lik if you even see one
It's interesting, but the internal dialogues and monologues are very childish, even the development of the story itself. I hope that over time you will improve those not so mature aspects. Luck!
the idea is good but very bad on the execution also hope you remove harems as its one of if not the hardest to use as a novel standpoint like many harems here are trash lik if you even see one