Really difficult to understand the story because of the constant switching of povs and the lack of description, the lack of description is really annoying because we don’t know what the fanfic is even about or what changes you made from the original
a month ago
33
Dao_Of_Sauce
Is the mc just Mark but his name is Sentry and not invincible now? Definitely not what i was expecting.
a month ago
20
Frizepize
1 star on the very confusing narrative.
but I'll change it to 5 star for brain hemorrhage, if this was the intention of the author in the first place cause it was well aligned and done pretty good in my opinion.
a month ago
8
ray_davis_2420
I like everything you done so far please do not dropped this.
a month ago
3
Ket0
It’s good so far the people feel like real characters and it’s not just a copy and paste of the original story however I hope you continue to update and not drop the story thank you very much
a month ago
2
voidsleeper
I appreciate the concept but my only issue is that the writer is making the grammar needlessly complicated. He/she should learn that a good book isn't meant to be too hard to read cus advanced grammar just ruins the immersion.
a month ago
1
2FROZEKILLA
I havent resd but the theme is dope hope you dont drop
25 days ago
0
RedSky_San
The very first chapter already felt like a thesaurusfic, with a number of random adjectives and words added for seemingly no reason. After that, it felt painfully generic, the dialogue felt stiff for some reason, and the author decided to use "Marcus" for Mark and "Will" for William. Why?
Really difficult to understand the story because of the constant switching of povs and the lack of description, the lack of description is really annoying because we don’t know what the fanfic is even about or what changes you made from the original
Is the mc just Mark but his name is Sentry and not invincible now? Definitely not what i was expecting.
1 star on the very confusing narrative. but I'll change it to 5 star for brain hemorrhage, if this was the intention of the author in the first place cause it was well aligned and done pretty good in my opinion.
I like everything you done so far please do not dropped this.
It’s good so far the people feel like real characters and it’s not just a copy and paste of the original story however I hope you continue to update and not drop the story thank you very much
I appreciate the concept but my only issue is that the writer is making the grammar needlessly complicated. He/she should learn that a good book isn't meant to be too hard to read cus advanced grammar just ruins the immersion.
I havent resd but the theme is dope hope you dont drop
The very first chapter already felt like a thesaurusfic, with a number of random adjectives and words added for seemingly no reason. After that, it felt painfully generic, the dialogue felt stiff for some reason, and the author decided to use "Marcus" for Mark and "Will" for William. Why?