Danmachi: Bell Gojo throughout the Multiverse

You only get such a low score mainly due to your writing being awful, I'm not gonna sugarcoat it because then you wouldn't learn from it. This entire story sounds like it was written by an 8-year-old. I suggest using either Grammarly or QuillBot Ai, they don't instantly make your writer better, but they can scan your text tell you what's wrong, and give you ideas on how to improve.

Author, I think you had a good idea for the story, but you still need to improve your writing quality a little. As another guy commented, you need more description of the scenes, and also better formatting, because there are places that needed a paragraph and don't have one... but the idea is good, your writing stability is also good, you just need to improve your writing and you'll be a good writer.

It's entertaining, so that your inspiration doesn't go away you should upload chapters every two or three days, obviously the chapters being longer, or else short chapters but every day, in the end it's you who decides.

How do you feel this story should progress? Please comment, as I need your opinions to improve my story if there is something that people think is missing.

you should make it more descriptive .....

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