I'm David in Cyberpunk

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the story seems really interesting, Cyberpunk fanfics are always welcome, especially about the anime, the author seems to have a good knowledge about the world he is writing, but unfortunately the good things to talk about end here, the dialogues are honestly bad to follow, the author uses only a "-" and writes the speech, does not say who is talking or what is doing, not only becomes boring to read, but it is also tiring, I have lost count of how many times I have had that Stop reading just to situate myself about who was talking at the time, and this was in a conversation between only two people, nor do I want to imagine the confusion that will be when there is a conversation between a group of people, another negative point is the protagonist himself, himself states that in his past life he was not used to hurting people, but a few minutes after transmigrating he casually kills more than 10 bandit on a mission, piles their bodies and even seems bothered, to finish the... Criticism, it is recommended that a reader have an prior knowledge about various things about the world, because history explains nothing about what the world is like, how things work or how they look.

its really good cyberpunk fanfic but god the dialogue needs to be worked on. for the most part I cant tell whos talking and other times some of the dialogue doesn't even make sense at times.

The quality of the translation is... bad. But the story is good, is nice to have a David with a brain. Just... fix the quality, use Chatgpt or Grammarly.

Honestly pretty good, other than how speech is handled. You can just out the character name before -, when they are talking and it would help alot if you can't use ""

There are very few cyberpunk fanfics out there, so keep it up, this fanfic has a lot of potential, my review for this is five stars. change and out

chefs kiss great read my only complaint would be the formating but it isn't so bad that it makes the story unreadable

Its good to have a cyberpunk fic after all the other ones were abondoned. It’s well written for the most part and intresting. I agree with the other review the dialogue is confusing. You don’t write dialogue like that.

I want to like this story. But the translation is terrible. Theres constant use of the wrong word, phrases and idioms that dont translate to english, and worst of all the author isnt fixing anything. Id be a lot more inclined to support the author if he would fix the mistakes in his work, especially the ones people are pointing out to him but he doesnt fix anything as far as I can tell. It feels very low effort. The plot is good, but untill the author fixes the translation I cant reccomend reading this fanfic. Which sucks because theres barely any cyberpunk fanfics

It desperately needs an editor. The English is broken and most of the sentences don't make sense. Wrong words are used repeatedly. I made it to chapter 2, it might get better as it goes but I can't keep struggling through.

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Hey, I just wanted to say you doing great with this fic hell I look forward to it every day. so keep saying thank you and doing great work. G.B.Y.

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Great story and amazing take on David without the dumb system cliche that everyone uses. The writing needs work but the story is pretty good structure with good character interaction and solid story pacing