Harry Potter: Toji Potter

ok so I have thoughts. first this is your story you do you. having said that a couple things stand out. one is that there is no detail on the how or why of the matter, just he "did it". I've only got to chapter ten and can see several loopholes. first, how did he get to the leaky cauldron, how did he get the respect of the goblins, how did he immediately identify Daphne. so on and so fourth. there is no how. on the other hand. the actions of the background charaters make no sense. like at all. not at any point have I seen a reaction beyond " OMG HE AMAZING". not that that can't happen but it goes back to WHY. what is the thought process of them making there, kinda ridiculous, choices. I think the premise of the story as huge potential. but needs more thought put into it. I think you can make a real entertaining story with a little more time and practice.

The entire story feels rushed and practically screams ai generated

it reads like a mix between a ff .net novel and AI generated. harry potter goes to Gringotts, gets his heritage tested (and gets multiple lordships of course)and horcrux removed, all things you see a million times on ff .net. acts like a young master and hates dumbledore. again, it just reads like a weirdly written bashing fic. if you know you know.

Toji spotted.

Just your average OP reincarnate fanfic with confusing story developments. It also seems like it’s also a harem.

Hope you enjoy this and comment, drop Stones and review. It doesn’t take too much time 😁

Reveal Spoiler

Alright, looked at the description if the story, Toji is in his 30s during 2006, and Harry Potter first came out in 1997, so let's say Toji was 30, he would've been 21 when the book came out, so Toji wouldn't have been able to read it as a kid.

So I reach till Dumbledore versus Voldemort. I am waiting to have at least 50 more chapters so I can binge read again like what I did with the One Piece one. Again it's not perfect but for someone just starting and actually doing this for free, author is doing great. There are some parts of inconsistency. A lot of earlier ideas of MC on what to do got forgotten then on latter parts brought out like it was the first time. But overall salute to author. Keep it up and I'm waiting for more

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