Orion wasn’t expecting a prophecy in the bustling market of Cerros-7, where he had been deployed on a mission, when a woman cloaked in tattered veils, her eyes glowing like embers from a dying fire suddenly appeared in front of him. With a grip as cold as death itself, she seized Orion’s hand and, in a voice that cut through him like a blade, she whispered:
"The sky must fall for your star to rise,
A veil of despair shrouds crimson skies.
Through ash and ember, your brilliance softly flies,
A light reborn where endless darkness lies."
Everything unfolds naturally, which makes the world feel alive and immersive without overwhelming you. The characters are another standout. They’re deeply developed and feel incredibly real, with flaws, motivations, and emotions that make them relatable and engaging.
Great politics and realism so far but I am curious to see how it will develop. Although I will probably have to stack some chapters if I like the story.
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So far the 5 chapters has me desperate to read more. The writing is gorgeous, the characters feel real, and the stakes are sky-high. If you’re into political scheming this is 100% worth your time. One thing I don't quiet like though is the fact that we don't relate to Orion, there are some hints about his past life sure, but there should be some memories and reflections more.
While the synopsis does a great job of grabbing attention with its intriguing premise, I feel it could go a step further to truly pull readers in. Please consider editing it and adding more details.
World-building? Amazing. The premise is super interesting, and the way the author describes everything is so vivid and beautiful—it’s like you can see it all playing out in your mind. The whole world feels real it’s impossible not to get completely sucked in.
The plot? Absolutely gripping—it’s the kind of story that keeps you glued to the page, heart racing, because you just have to know what happens next, a good blend of futuristic realism and dreamlike. And the way it’s all written? Sharp, witty, and packed with so much personality—it’s impossible not to get sucked in. It’s such a unique mix, and honestly, I’m completely hooked.
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Para ser honesto, no esperaba que pudiera leer los primeros capítulos tan bien, todo se leyó de un solo aliento, construyendo paz, relaciones, personas, todo está bien.
"Okay, I have to ask—when does the 'Mecca of Mecha' part kick in? 😂 10 chapters in, and I’m still waiting for those mecha to show up! Don’t get me wrong, I’m loving the story so far (the world-building and characters are awesome), but I’m starting to wonder if the mechas are just late to the party. Keep up the great work, though.
I just wanted to say how much I’m loving this story! Your writing is incredible, and I’m completely hooked on the plot and characters. Any chance we could get more chapters per day? I’d be thrilled to support you in any way I can. Keep up the amazing work, and thank you for sharing this gem with us