Orion awakens in Runeterra, thrust into the events of Arcane's timeline. Will his presence bring salvation or disaster? Read for yourself to see what chaos is left in his wake!
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A/N: Undecided direction on how this will go, how dark it might get, romance, etc.
Never wrote before, just throwing stuff down.
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Jinx’s for the FMC is the only way to go best wife
I can't find myself to feel anything for this story at this point other than annoyance tbh. You had a solid start, then you got too enthusiastic about punishing the kids. Despite all the changes, you had to keep things close to canon with the main events e.g. having benzo die, vandar die, jinx causes an explosion again, vi not learning anything despite having caused problems multiple times. If youre gonna add another character to change things have canon characters develop alongside them. Your MC is always confused or in pain, despite 50+ chapters he’s still the same as he was in chapter 10, both character and ability wise. Whenever important events happen everyone is reset to default settings as if none of the original events happened.
as I say this mmm it's a shitty story, only those who can turn off their brain or lack one could read such garbage, the mc is a disaster, it seems as if you had copied the standard character that each isekai uses and you had not put even a little bit of common sense into it, he's in a fucking dump breathing toxic air without any apparent support and with a shitty body and his first lines are basically "Great I'm in Arcane, I can't wait to see my favorite characters and save them :D because that's what I will do, I will save them :D" fucking attitude of the protagonist fulfills wishes, the interactions with the arcane characters?, zero seriousness with the abomination that you created on the scene, the mc walks through the streets as if it were his house ignoring the constant danger as well as his difficult situation until he meets Vi, and if she didn't break the face of the brat that she doesn't even know for being arrogant and mocking with her, it was only because of the pure shitty plot. And things don't improve later. My advice to the reader? Don't read this excuse for a story if you don't want to lose your neurons, don't punish your brain with this, get out of here and save your soul because the kingdom of God ends in the first chapters, you have been warned.
Chapters are super short and most of it is the MC whining or confused. Even powder seems more mature than this MC. Can you fix whatever prompt you gave to the AI?
It’s too early to give a proper review, but I’m obsessed with Arcane, so I’m still going to give it a decent score. The grammar is fine not perfect, but good enough. The chapters feel a bit short; I’m used to 3k words per chapter, and these seem shorter than that. Still, good job, author—you’re doing a semi-decent job! Hope you dont make the main character overpowerd or rush romance. its always the best to take it slow.
5 page chapters, you might as well not write anything
This Arcane fic is awesome from what we can see in the first few chapters it is a reincarnation story where mc has magic which may sound simple at first but those who know runeterra know how much potential this seemingly simple idea has. I really hope this continues and I highly recommend this to people who see this review.
Very nice*******************************
my man, there's very few Arcane Stories over here, even less as good as this one, so, take this five stars, and please... continue this to the end, and all my power stones are yours. :)
It's decent. The main character is always whining and angry though. I read up to chapter 93.
Me a gustado mucho el desarrollo quw se a llevado en el personaje principal junto a la interacciones de los personajes con este y por supuesto la historia que es entretenida y intrigante, otra cosa que agrada es que el protagonista no es super poderoso inmediatamente y se va desarrollando de manera inteligente su poder. Otra cosa es el hecho de saber cosas de la trama pero aun si no poder solucionar todo de inmediato pero que poco a poco se muestre una idea de solución es muy agradable.
A solid read so far. The author gives the characters their due, keeping the personalities convincingly realistic and faithful to the original. Interactions between characters feel fluid and natural, but the writer’s inexperience writing dialogue shines through during a few conversations. Other than that I can’t fault this work in any way. Great job so far, and keep it up 👍
Let me tell you why this is deserves only 1 star. Before anything, spoilers alert but I hope you read the review because it will save your time this bs. First before you guys think anything I will tell you that this fanfic doesn't have any romance, jinx is not the love interest, vi is not love interest, Caitlyn is not the love interest, jinx doesn't even exist and Powder is with ekko and vi with Caitlyn. Don't think the 1 star is because there's no romance. Second, it will fool you with good chapters at first and then bam!! Disappointment after disappointment. He will gone (forced) to another country for 2 years, you know, for time skip but he didn't grow at all, not in power and definitely not in brain. He saved the city and help people for 2 time and two time they betray him, vandar betray him. Caitlyn, his good friend decides that he is too dangerous. Also after the second time he save the city they will lock him up in a prison for six years, another useless item skip with MC becoming even worse. I really hope you guys spare yourself the rage you will feel from this fanfic, sure it's not real and it's fantasy and a fanfic but still if you really like reading then you know why this a disappointment.
The story is good but the mc is too much of a fan boy for me
reading your fanfiction brings me so much comfort, and its something i truly look forward to after a long day at work. theres something about your writing that helps me unwind and escape yk. keep it up brother.