Maybe a happy ending

I liked it, it's easy to read and it has a good story, keep it up

The writing quality is top-notch, and story development is a Wow-factor. I like what you did here.

Story is well written, and has quite a bit of future potential. Just remember this though, if you yourself, enjoy writing your stories, then that is the one thing that should matter the most more then anything else. Sometimes, it is not about any sort of money or payment, but should in fact, always be about enjoying sharing your work with your viewers and fans. And that, should always take priority, because if your fans and viewers enjoy reading your work, as well as potential future generations, then that is the one thing, that should matter more to you then anything else. For you see, people are more concerned in living in the here and now. While people me, we like to have a more, long game in mind. Now, don't take this as some sort of negative by any means, I am just saying, that if we want future generations to enjoy this world, then we have to be willing to protect what we love, in an effort to do our best to better our future

It's gonna be honest here, the plot is actually great. Like, the story is there, I can see the plot and where it is going. It's solid in that aspect. As for the characters, I liked that they are 'alive', like you can feel their thoughts and personality. They are not just a cardboard cut out. I actually have an issue in making characters alive. I rated the story development, character design, and the world background a 5/5. As for the update stability, I don't know your schedule but I'm basing this on webnovel standard. Usually webnovel authors update daily, so in this part, I gave you 4/5. I do have some advice about the 'writing quality' part. I won't nitpick on the grammar or fluidity, but I think something is a bit off about the format. Like, I can immerse myself in the story because I'm interested in it. But if you're gonna say that this type of formating can hook readers? I don't think so. I noticed a few problems, and I'm saying this as a reader. • The charger 1 format is a bit unreadable. I'm not sure what device you are using but in the mobile phone version, your format looks like this. (An example as to how it is in mobile) Lili wanted to go to the beach h, but her mother didn't allow w her to because shes's afraid Lily will drown. That's what it looks like in mobile. • Jam-packed paragraphs. Just like I said, the plot is great, but the paragraphs are kinda intimidating. I have a suggestion, you can actually slice the paragraphs into smaller sections, most reader have short attention span so I doubt they will read long paragraphs with getting bored. That's it. Those two are the problems I kinda like to point out. Its's not actually a big issue since you can just edit it, like put spacing and adjust the format. What's my conclusion? This book is a unpolished jade. Its's good but it had a lot of room for improvement. I wish you good luck in your journey!

an honest review , honestly I don't read short stories like this but it's some kinda remind me of a novel that my friend made it's gave the same vibe too, to those readers who likes a short chapter with different not connected episode each chapter ! you should give it a try! and author, you have potential ! don't give up! keep it up! you just need some refinement about how you write the story, I like it but it leans more of story telling than action, my opinion though 😅 keep it up🔥

absolutely mind-blowing and captivating novel, Author🔥

Read upto chap 6 and I must say that it has potential❤️, the characters backstory and all were properly introduced🔥 and how the story keeps moving forward and improving for each part. Keep it up dear author hehe