Tingles spread all across my body and I snapped my head to see his. Both dark, savage eyes peered into mine, and I knew exactly what I hadn't wanted was happening.
"Mine."
They called him the Alpha of the Rogues. They said he couldn't be tamed. They said he was too evil for a mate. So imagine my surprise when he called me his.
DNF Plot seemed like it was going in a good direction but I couldn't get passed the non-quotation dialog. It was hard to understand if someone was talking, thinking internally, or narrating. Other than that the story was decent.
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