The Fruit of Infinity
Fruit of Infinity follows two rich, sassy, and obnoxious girls. They look down on everyone, in their own distinct ways. And are as cruel as f**k. From literally stepping on servants, to lighting them with fireworks, for the laughs.
To make things worse, they stumbled upon true power: a dateless Entity called Infinity, that'd existed since forever.
This Entity gave them his power and said. "Make your world interesting for me... I'll be watching."
These cruel, pompous ladies attained a position, setting them among the pinnacles of power in the entire universe. Now that they have this power; the world's gods, warlords, devils, and angels have never been so looked down upon.
Their goal, now, is to destroy 15% of the world, in order to spare 85%.
The earth literally exists on their whim.
Why aren't more people here?? This is amazing! Let's go into details. Writing quality would need more adjustments. It gets quite clustered and a bit confusing which is bad bcs it underwhelms the feels of the story. I recommend using grammarly, and the add-ons (author's note) should also be fluidly mixed into the story. This is the only problematic part of this novel i can pin down. Stability of updates seems good enough. Story development is interesting, We follow the protagonists from their knuckeheaded state which leads them into trouble before we enter the main interlude. My advise though is that it might get confusing and thus irritating to readers so it'll do good for the novel if the exposition is written more clearly. I keep saying clearly so lemme explain-- some parts feel clustered, despite it being a first perspective, the character's thoughts and the exposition should mingle well. It clashes a lot in the story leaving the readers quite confused. It'd great if author manages to capture the choas of the character's mind while streamlining the exposition with it. Smoothness, that's what i'm talking about. To be blunt, the writing feels a bit jarring and difficult to follow due to its slight erraticness. Despite its jaggard edges i see immeasurable potential, i like the dialogue and the way they speak. The characters feels authentic, from the two shi- idk but mc and their? friend. To infinity, i quite like her sleeping danger vibes, it was executed quite well enough to leave a lasting impression on readers (me haha). In conclusion, this feels raw. I see the potential, its impressive, the synopsis hooked me from the very first instant and I'm not kidding- who wouldn't like to see two brats messing up the world? Well i most definitely do. Believe it or not its an original concept. But it'd benefit from more editing. Like i say, it feels like the rawest version straight from the author's mind. More delibration would do it well, do consider author. Regardless, kudos to this wonderful piece of fiction. Keep going author, oh and I lied, you're cringe but you're not the only cringe one, we all are! And that's why you need to be cringe for us the cringe readers to actually enjoy... okay lemme see myself out lol.