The Rise of Valyria - House Belaegon
This is a story where the Targaryens weren’t the only dragonlords who survived the Doom of Valyria. Three friends, while discussing the ASOIAF world during a car ride, die in a car accident caused by icy roads. However, just before their deaths, they find themselves transported to the world of ASOIAF. With their new identities, they set out to rebuild ancient Valyria.
This idea has been in my mind for a long time, and it is my first book. Since English is not my native language, the translation quality might be poor. Please provide feedback so I can improve my writing.
Now that everything is ready, it’s time to tell you the story of the noble dragonlords and House Belaegon, known for forging Valyrian steel. The words of House Belaegon are: “Blood, Bone, and Steel.”
Try describing the main characters appearance a bit more and stop switching between their old names they are already in a new world, and they weren't using their old names long enough for it to make a difference between old and new, to me it just sounds like their switching between 6 different names, and it is annoying to keep following along. Perfectly describe each person's looks, their name, their weapon of choice, and the dragon they ride, then stick to it the rest of the story. Overall, has great potential, keep uploading more updates and I'll keep coming back to read. 9/10 So Far
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