Universal Lord: Creating My Valkyries Army
The era of Universal Lordship has come to this world, bringing many opportunities and challenges for humans.
At the age of eighteen, each person can acquire territory and participate in the Lord's continent, which will determine whether they can move into a vast world or die in mediocrity.
Thousands of years after the start of this era Neo looked up at the sky waiting for his opportunity, the opportunity to change his life and move toward a grander goal.
All lords choose an easy route and select a race that already exists but he wished to go against the current, so even if it was looked down upon he created his own race bravely and swore to fight tooth and nail for success.
This is the story of his journey as he walks step by step toward a grander future.
Overall a pretty good story considering the common premise and the common copy and paste of this kind of genre. However the author actually does this differently, although the mc has a major advantage of “being two people” it is a reasonably a fair cheat while the mc still has to fit into the framework that everyone else does while trying to make the most of his advantages along with planning to the best of his ability but not out of what can be consider a normal human. As for characters, the characters although not perfect, that is what makes them good because they have that small spark of humanity that will allow future development. Now let’s get into world background hasn’t been developed enough for me to give the green light or red light about it, which is good because if a story reveals to much background at once for no good reason the readers will feel bored and unable to get that sense of discovery along with the mc. Now onto advice for the author: 1. Don’t fall into the trap of my mc is perfect or he can’t make mistakes because that will annoy readers yes some readers may complain or leave but that won’t be the majority, 2. Don’t be afraid to punish your mc for his mistakes, mistakes generally come with consequences, whether it is tripping because you weren’t paying attention to where you are walking, or generals losing a part of their army because they mispredicted the enemies moves, 3. Have a hint of randomness in your story something not even you can predict, some of the best stories have hints of randomness to them, you could even get a wheel with a bunch of random events that you want to happen but aren’t sure how to implement them then spin it every 10 or 20 chapters, and if the event can be fit in the story with the mc’s current situation put it in then your mc has a random event that he will have to adapt to, but don’t try to force it because the. You will just be reducing the quality of the story rather than improve it. (Also I left everything vague so there will be pretty much no spoilers) anyway hope you all enjoy this story as much as I am and hope you all have a great day imma go back to reading
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it is good, but my problem with it is that you Created a race, I know that it is powerful, but it does not make sense that you made them have few people because It is a race, and it should have more members not few, And you made it harder to recruit than other races. It is a territory, and it cannot just have a few people defending it. From what I can see, it doesn't look like this novel will go far. It looks like it would be dropped at one point because the word view has collapsed.
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