In DC/Young Justice with the Omnitrix/Ultimatrix and a Chat Group

I want to see more ben 10 and Young justice stuff, and less bs about multiversal chat group.👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎

Story is good but why are you complicating every single conversation between characters , conversation Between intelligent people doesn't mean every single one of their conversation is made up of complicated terms.He is also very much limiting himself by joining Bruce and company and there have been no visible benefit from them till now.

OK LOVE THE IDEA OF BEN 10 IN DC..BUT IN THIS NOVEL, the main MC IS a total PUSSYcat A BEACH., CMON HE HAS a GOD WATCH ULTIMATRIX AND does NOT USE IT. WHAT A DUMBAZZ, HE JUST TALK NO guy of action...that is what kill this novel for me spinless coward mc that only talk AND those not move his azz..AUTHOR FIX THAT OR I AM WALKING OUT OF THIS NOVEL DUMBAZZ..IF I WAS THE MC, I WOULD CREATE GOD TECHNOLOGY AND RULE GOTHAM WITH MONEY BECOME GOD RICH

becomes batmans b i t c h enough said thought this story would be different but its all the same well keep up the good work author this just isnt my type of story

Please stop repeating information in dialogues. The worst thing is convincing Superboy. You mention stabilization, the time needed and other stuff AT LEAST FIVE TIMES. I get it, just stop. The same problem persists in multiversal chat - ALL their dialogues can be three times shorter without losing ANYTHING. Is this for total words count or what?

No story development... Just chat group bs. I dont have problem with direction of story but i didnt see any exciting development, no action, no romance, no drama... Nothing. From last 3 to 4 long chapter i am reading the philosophy and chat group conversions and that made me tired of the story

I like the story so far.... pretty good ngl

This fic has good potential but the plot is super forced, it ruins any enjoyment while reading it.

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multiverse chat group for the L.......... as in lame.

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the writing quality and world building are excellent, but the ploy sometimes feels forced like the Author ran out of ideas on where to go from this point and said aha I know what to do let's expose the mc to batman and have him become his mentor and unlikely family, also at some point the mc became a pushover that whenever the ask something of him he goes let me think about it and says yes anyways, his excuse is always resources, like bro you have a f**king ultramatrix, buy books, use gray matter and read them, start ur own company, store or some shit, don't cling to batman, altho he did resist batman's influence a little, he could've moved somewheres else, or string armed him a little, anyways good luck to the Author with his story but it's not for me, take what u will from this, it's just constructive criticism.

A pity that the author is deleting bad reviews, because I doubt very much that this crap, which is trying to be a story has such a high rating, the story is really bad.

nice 👍 i like the approach and asthetic on the writing don't be hard on yourself your doing great.