The Last Brooch
In a world where Brooches of Power dictate the fate of warriors, kingdoms, and even gods, the battle for ultimate control rages on. Some brooches bring light, others spread darkness—but one stands above them all: the Sheem Brooch.
A child lost to a storm. A war spanning generations. A destiny bound to magic.
When Bastin Terris is swept away by a great flood, he awakens in a world torn apart by legendary warriors, celestial beings, and corrupted magic. The brooch his father left him is no ordinary relic—it holds the key to a forgotten legacy, one that both heroes and tyrants seek to control.
But power comes at a price.
Lunéviel Noctis and Zahir-Shamranuddin-Ahfzek—two of the world’s most feared wielders—will stop at nothing to claim the Last Brooch. As Bastin grows, so does the war, drawing him into a conflict that threatens to consume the realms. Angels and demons. Titans and traitors. Warriors and gods.
Will he rise as the wielder of the Sheem Brooch, or fall into the abyss of fate?
The battle has begun. The Last Brooch must not fall into the wrong hands.
Kiddo, why you had a thought to discard it! This is so fine.. If you had asked me then I would had helped you and this could be a masterpiece by 2022 only! [img=update]
@Aechauhan, one thing I would like to mention, it's likely that this story is going to be viral, but you are capable enough to do so, for me, the story is going out well, and as Ms. Kannojia mentioned, English could be enhanced, and the story could be more lively, all the way it's good but still it can be more hooking than it currently is.
Well, it's childish.. But somehow not too bad... I wonder if you could be actually engaged with it.. You can do even better.... Keep trying!
Yup it is childish! But maybe it's too early to judge, but I feel like the story will grow into a boring piece, you still have time you can work and come up with a better story, as the story is in its beginning stage I give it at least a 3 star because there are chances for both upliftment and failure
Overall, your grammatical structures has to be enhanced, and substance wise you need a lot of improvement, that was it for constructive criticism. And, lastly the author can do better, your updating stability it decent... Having an average of 2 chapters per day is awesome beginning...