thief of fate
"I was nothing... and now, I have one chance to steal everything."
In his previous world, Ethan was just another failure. No talents, no dreams, no hope.
But death wasn’t the end it was a new beginning.
He wakes up in the body of “Valerian Lucard,” the son of a great family... but the weakest among them. Neglected, shunned, broken.
But this time, things are different.
He has an unbelievable ability:
Fate Theft.
Skills, talents, future opportunities... he can steal them, but at a heavy price.
And the worst part? What’s stolen... never lasts.
Now begins his race against everyone: the elites, the geniuses, the chosen heroes.
Not because he's strong, but because he refuses to be nothing... ever again.
In this world, either you steal glory... or everything gets stolen from you.
Positives: Unique concept, intriguing protagonist, strong mystery, logical power progression.(tfu) Negatives: Risk of repetition, unclear power rules, shallow antagonist, world needs more depth. Suggestions: Define power limits, introduce a strong rival, expand world-building. Final Rating for me ofc: 7.8/10 (Great potential if improved) but Interesting novel bro good job🦦
This is unique The synopsis is captivating Makes one wanna read even and The main character is quite a vibe Imagine waking up knowing you’re different from everyone else and could be played like a toy by others😹 I can see he strong n resilient there….
I thought at first , as if your novel would be , or seems to be like mine , but they totally are different things u did good work , but I'd like to spot some errors u did make , First things first it's the unnecessary description that feels and has a robotic touch , am not telling you are using AI , but u should lower the description , It just seems like you're describing for the sake of word count. secondly , there are many grammar errors especially in the namings . not a quick pace , The characters seem shallow and hasv no touch of life. The story is genuinely good , even with the idea of fate , Villain vs MC , fate's sons , being a redundant genre. sorry if i said bad , But you are still at the beginning of the journey , Use simple english , try describing a few , give the plot more , try to give it real life dialogues touch. you'll see the difference