Camelot's rise in Marvel

Besides the constant, incorrect usage of pronouns, the writing quality is fine. Update stability is fine. Story development is non'existent, 20 chapters and several hours of reading in and all that's happened is Artoria had a pointless cross country trip, loitered in Camelot for a few days, had a meeting with some nobodies and fury and Coulson making the same reppetetive observations again and again instead of actually doing something, there is no story because no one does anything and when they do do something it's pointless or boring or both. Character design is sub par, 20 chapters 0 development the only ones with any personality are Agravain (moody bastard) Gareth (innocent, happy child) and Mordred ( energetic, violent, insecure brat) but none of this matters because none of the Characters have any goals or any interesting interactions with each other. World background is bad too, it should feel like one of the Marvel universes but it doesn't since the only Marvel characters so far are the S.H.I.E.L.D cast who don't even feel like themselves since they're acting more like an appendage of the UK government and the Ancient One who popped in for 2 minutes rambled some nonsense and then left. This fic is not worth your time and I regret reading it, a shame since it could've been good if even a single fucking thing happened in this story.

Sir Arthur Came a lot didn't he... ... ...

yuri?

The novel starts very good and does a good job to make story interesting. The author said that he/she wanted to reveal that the mc is king arthur [Lion king from fate grand order] to everyone one earth and wanted to make the readers to see the reaction of that revelation. Now here the problem 2-3 chapters of that is fine but this has been going to for 10+ chapters in a row and 90% of these chapter are the same.

Hehehehe~!! Finally, someone has written my wishful thinking~. 'Camelot in the Marvel World; perfectly written World's Reactions; World Development; AND with the sense of ruling over the masses, but not as a Tyrant, but as a TRUE KING' *She is NOT some pushover KING who views herself as `equal to her citizens* PLEASE~!!! JUST DON'T DROP IT like other authors~.

can't read this anymore. 30 chapters in and not a damn thing happened. the two actions that artoria did was at the beginning, and even that was minimal. this is all politics, but the political keeps repeating over and over. like what the hell. get to the damn story, throw a punch, swing your weapons do something. this isn't a build up to anything. im sorry but this is just not good.

very boring, no plot development. nothing happens for 15 chapters. waste of time. Marvel world doesn't feel like that at all, instead some dull relationship with British bureaucracy

Good writing quality, updates are fine, and I'm fine with a slow plot development because it is heading somewhere. However, there are several issues for me personally that I wanted to address. First, the MC Artoria feels very out of character. The MC is supposed to be an amalgamation of different Artorias, yet, I'm not convinced that any of the Artoria's we're familiar with would decided they were going to rule England and all the other governments can screw off. Goddess Rhongomyniad traveled the world for 1500 years and only did the whole singularity thing because she wanted to preserve humanity. Saber Artoria specifically didn't want to rule again and want her wish on the grail to be for someone else to take it up. Alter was extremely apathetic and disillusioned with everyone. They all seemed to acknowledge that their kingdom fell and their ruling was over, so why is the MC suddenly deciding to lay claim as King of England? Even ignoring what I believe are severe inconsistencies in characterization, for me personally, I just don't like the idea of her trying to lay claim to England at this point in time. I would have been far happier if she just decided to bring Camelot back and treat it more like her own little kingdom, maybe butting heads with the locals that way, but not expecting everyone of England to bow to her. Especially when there is a rightful Monarch even if they're a constitutional Democracy. Likewise with the earlier comments I made, their pride and dignity I feel would force them to accept that someone else was rightfully king or queen. There are also some logical inconsistencies. Like, they're constantly touting how perfect and amazing Camelot is, and how it's the ideal that they should be forcing on all of England. Yet, they conveniently forget that Camelot fell and was destroyed, thereby completely severing Artoria's presumption of 'divine right' that she threw around at the first meeting. She had her chance, she failed, and now she's acting like she still has 'the right to rule'. Anyways, these are my thoughts, overall, it's a fairly good read with mostly issues from my own personal opinion and some more objective wrongs that I pointed out.

a true Gem in a sea of mediocrity

Today marks a sad day, for it is today that I have given up hope for this fanfic. A review for a fic is meant to give insight for the average reader on your opinion of the story, the good, the bad, and in this case, the ugly. So it is with a heavy heart that I give my review on this fic, which I have been holding out so much hope for. For a quick overview of what the story is about; the main character is a reincarnator who inherits the abilities and memories from around four variants of Artoria Pendragon, from the Type-Moon. She has ended up in the world of the Marvel Cinematic Universe, and she goes on to use her powers inherited from the many variants of Artoria to re-create Camelot, and later take over Britain, re-christening it to the Kingdom of Albion. She does this by using a Holy Grail, calling forth her knights, and securing her right to rule. Now, to begin this review on a good note, I shall start with the fic's incredible update speed and stability. Few fic's post once a day, and even fewer hold such consistency after a month, but this one has held up well, so it can have that much. The only detraction to this, is the fact that each chapter is rather short. 5/5 Stars. Unfortunately, it is only downhill from here... For starters, the Writing Quality... For most, it is adequate, as in no major, and very few minor spelling errors, and good grammar overall throughtout the entire fic, however, there is a glaring issue with the writing style... or more specifically, the authors complete lack of one. What I mean by this, is the fact that it is as clear as day that the author has used ChatGPT to 'polish' the fic, causing the overall structure to have been altered in such a soulless manner, that the text writing style lacks any and all substance, instead being bloated with contrived metaphors. GPT has an intrinsic problem with describing things like progress, feelings and the overall mood. Using descriptions like 'More precise and more controlled' each time a character improves in something, which cheapens the term, and makes it feel lazy, while not properly describing what has changed. Using AI is like drinking poison to cure your thirst in regards to writing, so I can only give Writing Quality a reluctant 3/5 stars, since there are few issues with spelling and grammar. Now, onto Character design... Let us begin with the main character. She has no sense of identity. Yes she is reincarnated as multiple Artoria Variants, but she has no true sense of self. From the beginning, she basically takes up the identity of Artoria, despite not being her, which while not totally uncommon in fanfics, here she takes on the extra mile and 'becoming' her in full, to the point she sees herself as Artoria. Not a terrible idea.... but there is a slight problem... she does in no way act, sound or feel like Artoria in any way. She comes across as monotone and almost soulless, which you might say is in line with how Artoria acted before meeting Shirou, or the Grail Wars, but no, in Fate/Zero she acts more in line with how she was when alive, or in Chaldea, but neither is like this variant. The only one slightly similar is Goddess Rhongomyniad, which checks most of the boxes for having no true personality, and being more of an echo of Artoria, so if that was the goal, then the author has nailed the impression. But then the question is, why? Why of all variants choose the one that has as much personality as a piece of cardboard? To end it off, my impression of her is a person going though a massive identity crisis, with no clear personality, other than doing things they feel Artoria would have done. The only characters that are slightly in line with their cannon counterparts are Mordred, Fury, Toney Stark and Agravaine, and that is only due to them having a clear 'trait' that is so integral to their characters, that not having it would make it impossible to write them, AKA: Mordred's tomboyishness, Fury being overly suspicions of everyone and saying Mother Fvcker, Stark flirting with anything with a pulse and being snarky, and lastly Agravaine is just incredibly competent and moody. The rest of the knights, Shield members, and Black Widows lack a true voice, and it shows. Overall, I must give Character design a 1/5 Stars for such lack of overall identity. I'll put story development and World Background in the same segment, as they are closely tied together. The story is slow, as in it took the Main Character twenty chapters to do something substantial, followed by six 'world reaction' chapters, that only serve to retell what has happened, while not trying to show how the greater powers and common folk view Artoria's actions. The latter part is not a terrible idea, but it's execution is terrible, causing the story to have terrible pacing, and making it feel like the story is dragging its feet at multiple points, as the multiple reaction chapters are a common occurrence. The issue with it as well, is that it is framed in such a way to show the others fear and apprehension, while making Artoria look more impressive, influential, and powerful. Not that any of it isn't true, but doing it so often, and to such an extent comes across as glazing to the highest extent, The story has accomplished scant little in over 90 chapters, due to the problems stated above, leading to a few other issues with the pacing, and makes it feel that the story is lacking direction, as very little is happening. Sadly, these two categories get a 1/5 and 2/5 stars respectively.¨ That leaves this fic with a 2.4/5 stars for me, which is such a pity. I have been waiting for the story to improve, but I have had to give up after the repeated lack of improvement in the narrative and written aspect of the story. it is such a shame, as the concept is very good, but the execution is unfortunate... I wish the author all the best, and I deeply hope they improve their work, so that one day I can come to enjoy it

Reaction can be fun if something happens to react to. 20 chapters of reaction to the same thing is not. I read to like chapter 23 sincerely before just dropping it and checking here and there to see if something happens and it's still nothing. I rarely write reviews on this website since it's not a airport and i don't need to announce my departure but this man, the concept is super nice but the execution... i really can't deal with waiting for a chapter every day that is just more of the same reaction. If it was mass released and i can get through it in a binge, that would make it more tolerable.

I really wish I could give you a 5 star but Jesus most of them are just reaction and super slow in the plot you could have just added a slow story tag in the story because there's barely any progress in the story like come on even in the story you based it on you know where a person reborn as saber literally a Chinese novel story seems way better than this and actually have good fighting scenes I'm not hating I actually like this story development the slow progress but please just let the story be a bit faster than this introduce more characters from marvel and include more fight scenes not just reaction

shitiest novel i've read

Honest opinion jot bored after chapter 30 nothing significant really happened to the story, and where is the TVA they would have noticed Mc the moment she appeared, she an anomaly on their sacred time line, this guy would not even care but wouldn't erishem notice because from what I understand he's monitoring Earth, and my the hell is she not learning the portal magic it's op she can use it to travel between different reality and universes