Rise of an Immortal

I hate to be the downer, but here I am. The plot is very basic, and the main character is... well, a narcissist. Honestly, he’s quite boring and behaves like a 15-year-old, which is kind of sad. He sees everything in black and white, exhibiting a typical childish mentality. For example, if someone throws a punch at him, he feels the need to throw back ten punches because that’s what “cool guys” do. The writing is frustratingly annoying, it's been generated by chatGTP or whatever ai program used to "improve" the narrative. I don't have much else to say about it, except that it simply wasn’t good. Maybe I’m expecting too much? I’m not sure. Anyway, that’s just my opinion. You should try it out for yourself.! :)

Hi guys, I started new fanfic, this one is on my mind for a while and now it's here. If you have any questions or suggestions. comment them below.

Not good at all. It's one of those stories where the author states something in one chapter, then retcons it in the next, then in the 3rd chapter it's back like the retcon in the 2nd never happened. The writing quality is ok at least.

this is good but there are many stories where the MC joins the X-men or enters Xavier's School. maybe if something else like Entering the Brotherhood or something. but this is good continue as you wish.

I love it. worth a read so stop checking reviews and read it.

Some confusing decision mc's making he told about omni watch and he already Anissa personality but he keep ignoring her and he take back the omni watch from Rogue what happen in I'm going to use this to trach your location thingy? but overall it's good just put more information about his decision thingy got kindy confused when he get the omni watch again

From what I’ve read it seems pretty good you already did a little character development and the mc power is dope.👍🏻🙂 Also love rouge she’s really underused for a love interest

I'm in love with this story so far, at least as far as I've gotten so far.

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you doing great 👍 keep up the good work I enjoyed your work

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Nice concept, i really did not waste my time reading this ff. Love this unique world build it is really marvelous. The MC is really lifelike, He grows more mature just like his power. Not some mc that wakes up in another and set high grow for childish reason.

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