Rise of an Immortal

I hate to be the downer, but here I am. The plot is very basic, and the main character is... well, a narcissist. Honestly, he’s quite boring and behaves like a 15-year-old, which is kind of sad. He sees everything in black and white, exhibiting a typical childish mentality. For example, if someone throws a punch at him, he feels the need to throw back ten punches because that’s what “cool guys” do. The writing is frustratingly annoying, it's been generated by chatGTP or whatever ai program used to "improve" the narrative. I don't have much else to say about it, except that it simply wasn’t good. Maybe I’m expecting too much? I’m not sure. Anyway, that’s just my opinion. You should try it out for yourself.! :)

Hi guys, I started new fanfic, this one is on my mind for a while and now it's here. If you have any questions or suggestions. comment them below.

this is good but there are many stories where the MC joins the X-men or enters Xavier's School. maybe if something else like Entering the Brotherhood or something. but this is good continue as you wish.

Too many inconsistencies I got to chapter 8 and I could no longer keep ignoring them. @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@

Ai written slop. That has no depth and one-dimensional characters. If you're going to make an extremely overpowered main character, then you need to dive into characteristics and relationships, not whatever this is. Just the thing with Anna is they were attacked by Sabertooth, and now they have some indistructible bond, even though they barely know each other. He is also some god level extrovert now that absolutely no one seems to dislike. There is no story here, you can't make action-oriented plot lines because of his overpowered abilities, and the writer fails at making any sort of meaningful relationships, and impactful philosophical dilemmas.

I love it. worth a read so stop checking reviews and read it.

This story has a lot wrong with it. Numerous writing inconsistencies, several NPC interactions, and overall comes off as AI slop reworded to hide the fact its AI. I couldn’t recommend a story any less than I do this one. 🥀🥀🥀

Some confusing decision mc's making he told about omni watch and he already Anissa personality but he keep ignoring her and he take back the omni watch from Rogue what happen in I'm going to use this to trach your location thingy? but overall it's good just put more information about his decision thingy got kindy confused when he get the omni watch again

let's start this with the bad things: the mc is kind of a basic one, i don't mean to say that as the bad part, the bad part is that the mc is kind of all over himself but just sometimes which is good, shows confidence, it's just that sometimes it kind of is a bit annoying. now with the female leads (spoilers here, careful), I love the now, I like the personality and the way they interact with each other, but the personality development of rogue, that rubs me on a bad spot to say something, at some point she becomes ABUSIVE and even flirts with other man... believe me when I say that if not because the fanfic was so good I would have dropped it, good thing that that got changed and she is better now, hope that mistake is not done again. and lastly on the bad things (this one may not count for some), a bit of a small harem and very limited one at that so far (where I'm at the time of posting this), there are 2 (rogue and Jean) that are in the harem and one (Diana) that may get into the harem, but autor stated that there would be just 3 for each universe the mc visits, it's not bad but it is limiting because, well, a lot of wife material in Marvel and DC. now for the good stuff: MC's development is quite good to be honest, we can see some development in him, in terms of the power scale he is above a normal Superman, yea that is strong but not super strong or godlike, at least not yet. in terms of story development, we see a good pace, not too fast, not too slow, I love this kind of fanfics because it does not feel rushed and does not get sucked, love it. the time skips are good, well placed, there are fics and novels where 1 week can take 100 chapters... if not more, glad we have a good development here! side characters: hmmm I like and also don't like that you don't use or show many of the possible side characters that marvel has, like Wong, he at some point in Marvel is one of the favorites of the sanctum, sadly we don't see much of him, but I get it, writing a lot of the side characters can be not needed so I can live with that. I hope you like the review author, i really like this fanfic, please don't drop it.

Peak though his powers are wierd sometimes they instantly make him stronger than his foes with resistance to their powers sometimes they take quite a bit of time(mainly storm)

From what I’ve read it seems pretty good you already did a little character development and the mc power is dope.👍🏻🙂 Also love rouge she’s really underused for a love interest

I have found this story genuinely interesting and am happily going to wait for more as it is a story that I’ve rarely seen work this well, great work

AI, inconsistent powers, and boring MC.

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