Hinata’s The Strongest Diplomatic (Naruto: Book 3)
You are a Momodo, a mystical being who shouldn’t exist in the Shinobi world. A relic from another plane. One of only 100 allowed into a dimension not your own.
You awaken in the Land of Fire—but you’re not a baby. You appear in human form with no memories beyond instinct and power sealed behind a System.
The trigger:
Hinata’s attempted kidnapping by the Hidden Cloud.
The moment this timeline’s fate is meant to fracture, you awaken—and time pauses.
A system appears:
[Author System Awakening…]
You are the only being allowed to write fate as you walk it.
You do not read this story. You decide how it’s told.
From here on, whenever you face a moment of fate, four choices will appear.
Each one leads to power, loss, or deeper purpose.
Your Power: Momodo Class – “The Author”
You’re not bound by elements, but concepts.
Your jutsu are shaped by words, emotion, and judgment.
Every skill you unlock changes the narrative around you.
First System Activation (During Hinata’s Kidnapping)
As Hiashi rushes to intercept the Hidden Cloud ninja, time freezes.
Your eyes snap open.
A silver title hovers before you in the moonlight.
[Narrative Divergence Detected]
Scenario: Hinata Hyuga Kidnapping – Timeline Branch Available
Choose your influence:
1. Intercept the kidnapper silently and erase all memory of the event.
2. Reveal yourself to Hiashi and offer a pact to protect Hinata, for a price.
3. Rewrite Hinata’s fate: make her a Momodo-bound and mark her soul.
4. Let the kidnapping occur, and use the fallout to infiltrate the Cloud.
Your system pulses.
A new word appears beneath your hand:
[AUTHOR CHOICE REQUIRED]
Humble self rating! A Mamodo in the shinobi world! However this is an author type mamodo, new never seen before! How will he make Hinata the strongest and change the ninja world?
The story is definitely creative, and while it's nice to breathe fresh air (pun not intended)... The story feels fake, it's almost like it was generated by AI. Chapter 9 when the third Hokage said ripples becomes waves, I almost dropped the story... I kept going until chapter 11 when she became an observer... I didn't finish the chapter... I don't know what I could possibly recommend or say for positive feedback, the story just isn't for me, oh I know, maybe you tried too hard to make Hinata mysterious, ethereal, and empathetic while being indifferent? Oh, I know, as a reader, I can't sympathize, it feels too foreign? Like I said, this story just aint for me.