Summary:

A lone Protoss Probe falls in the final battle for Aiur—only to awaken in a strange, unfamiliar galaxy under twin suns. Stranded in a humanoid body, stripped of the Khala, and surrounded by countless alien species, she discovers that one thing remains: her ability to build. From the sands of Tatooine, she begins to reconstruct a forgotten order—one pylon, one structure, one unit at a time.

But resources are scarce, allies are uncertain, and the rules of this universe are unlike anything the Koprulu sector ever knew. As she navigates cultural confusion, trade with Jawas, and attacks from Tusken Raiders, a single directive remains: survive, adapt... and build a kingdom that will never fall.

This is my very first fanfiction, written with the help of AI assistance. I hope you enjoy the journey—and where it might lead.

Star Wars in Between Empires

ACTION

ADVENTURE

REINCARNATION

NONHUMAN

STARWARS

The story is a great idea thus far, but I have a few complaints and questions:

- The chapters are WAY to short and feel really rushed. I don’t know if how long the MC has spent on Tatooine, but its enough that they are considered some kind of folklore by the moisture farmers when this other character shows up. Slowing the story down and explaining a few things would have made it easier to understand what the h*ll is even going on.
- Also (this is a sidenote, but it annoyed me) how long has MC been on Tatooine? Because the MC goes from using pictograms and miming to trade with Jawas, to speaking fluent Basic with a rebel (calling her that because her species is never defined as anything other than “unknown biped”).
- The MC is interesting, but I have no earthly clue what media the MC is initially from (I think its StarCraft, but I have never played the game so…) and there is no explanation of the MC’s powers. We (the readers) are just supposed to automatically know what the MC can do, just because, and that their powers are now tied to The Force (somehow, no explanation given).
- I am confused on why the MC goes from an inorganic to an organic creature one minute (blindly accepting that “it is what it is” and moving on) and then they can just change their form willingly. None of it gets explained due to the short (rushed) chapters.
- The MC’s motivation (s) for doing what they are doing are not clarified. The MC starts with just building and trading because (I guess) that’s all they knew from before being isekai’d then, suddenly, the MC is planning to build a “balanced” faction at the fringes of known space to be some kind of “space sweden.” Again, the story needs more details and slower development to make it understandable.
- The story seems to take place in the “original trilogy” timeline, but that’s only my belief because their is a character who crashed an X-Wing. So maybe some clarification on when we are in the timeline would be helpful.

Despite all of this, I am craving Star Wars stories and this is interesting enough to keep me engaged right now.