Of Threads and Thunder
In a continent torn by ancient gods and rising kingdoms, power is everything. Some wield mana to cast spells and shape elements. Others, like the warriors of Blóðfjöll, are bound to Æther—divine energy that transforms the body and leads the worthy toward godhood.
Kyjell Erikson is fifteen. A prince. A warrior. The son of the strongest man on the continent. But he’s not a hero—yet.
What begins as a brutal coming-of-age trial soon spirals into something far greater: war, betrayal, and a thread of fate that even the gods can’t control. As two great powers clash—one holy, one forged in blood—Kyjell will be forced to rise, fall, and rise again in a world where monsters wear many faces… and some don’t bleed when cut.
Bound by rune and thunder, his journey will test more than strength.
It will test what it means to be human.
This is a story of war and love. Of fate and rebellion.
Of a boy who was never meant to survive… and might become something no god can kill.
First of all, compliments where they are due: You have beautiful writing skills. The quality is excellent and the designing of both the main character as well as the monsters he has faced are well fleshed out and sculpted phenomenally. The story is action filled while also cleanly delving into the past events of your main character and smoothly showing the emotions and development he goes through, granting the reader an exciting yet pleasant experience. Overall, I believe that your story has great potential and can reach new heights is you keep up the good work. Now for certain suggestions I have: Firstly, you can make use of italics. Whenever you use terms/names that are not in English, you can type them in italics in order to put emphasis on the term. Same can be applied to sound effects, inner thoughts or when you wish to add weight/importance to a specific word/phrase in dialogue. Secondly, there was a segment in chapter 13 that was repeated word for word in chapter 14.I am not sure if it was intentional but I shall point it out just incase Thirdly, this is completely optional but when you introduce aide characters (like in chapter 9) before you finish off their segment, you can add a few lines of back story about how the characters became the way they are at present. This will help to broaden the perspective of the reader. Lastly, a short segment(maybe in the form of a flashback) you can briefly describe how Æther works in your story or how it came to be. That is everything I have to say. You have fantastic skills as an author and your work bear great potential, but always remember to take proper care of yourself as well. I wish you the very best with your future endeavors and hope your book gains the proper attention it deserves.
In reading the first ten chapters. I see that this story has a lot of action. As it progress further it moved from one battle to another. The fight scenes are well detailed and not too flashy. Overall, the pacing has no problems it moves the story forward and at a steady pace. The world building is good as well, it reminds me of stories that uses Norse Mythology in its lore. The story is fun to read and is action filled. I recommend this story to those who is fan of Norse inspired stories and games like God of War: Ragnarok or Skyrim, Thor and the like. Thank you for introducing your story to me author. I appreciate reading your work.