Interesting
I like the development of this power system
The character might need more work
The writing quality makes you look like a newbie with a good story
Just make sure that you review your work before posting
I'm noticing some inconsistencies that you could work on too
Interesting I like the development of this power system The character might need more work The writing quality makes you look like a newbie with a good story Just make sure that you review your work before posting I'm noticing some inconsistencies that you could work on too