Twilight The Stranger's Gaze

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Honestly surprised that I enjoyed the slow burn of this story’s development but it’s really good so far and the Mc is given a detailed background and brings a new challenge for the the hidden world of the supernatural with pure intelligence and author really makes every character feel alive and even though some complain about the choice of the mc’s romantic interest which becomes obvious pretty soon I think it’s set up fairly well and works with the mc’s attitude and upbringing the only complaint is some of the gender swaps in the beginning but it’s a small issue tht gets better after like chap 20 or so and isn’t that big a deal. Great read so far though and can’t wait to see more of this story!

not sure how to feel about this if, MC thinks alot and more of it is just monologing and what is with the AI text? like the chpater im on now is all mixed up with ("..") and (–) for talking, its very confusing

I'm confused by your writing style or specifically the way you write your dialogues it keeps changing. Can you stick to the most common style? ` ` for thoughts, " " for the actual. please?

The synopsis sounds like soulless AI. I really hope it‘s not.

First, like 40 chapters have pronoun problems with every sentence and is horrifically either written by A.I. or grammar checked by it. Takes about 55 chapters for the novel to actually begin. The first 54 are just the MC obsessing over Edward and licking the toes of Bella being her personal orbiter. The love interest (Alice) is a Temu version of her actual character and this is thus far the only novel to make me dislike her; the protagonist has more chemistry with literally every character other than her, including the men. Also, the overpowered and romance tag. Overpowered: The MC is a normal human pseudo-intellectual who thinks he's the shit but would get insta-gibbed by even the weakest Vampire/Shifter in Twilight. The only feats he has thus far is knocking out a high schooler and beating down 4 grown men. Romance: Up to chapter 60, literally none; not even a romantic gesture.

Overpowered tag is kinda to much. #slowmo ........................................ ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... HO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RB

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Shameless Review by the author I hope you give the work a chance!

main character is engaging and very interesting; pace neither slow nor too rushed; original and exciting plot development... overall: an excellent story!

. Damn, that's normal. I'm glad I read past chapters 10-15. You were just getting going. The first 15+ chapters are overly complicated with turns of phrase. I don't know how to describe it properly... when you read something like that, it's just too much. This is ... Like a long formula, how to write the number "pi" beyond the 2nd decimal place, complicated, beautiful and absolutely unnecessary. But I like your development of the story, this perspective is refreshing. I'm waiting to see how it goes further.

I just don't understand the hype with this ff.... after 65 chapters, nothing really happened besides bits of slice of life. If you removed the main character, it wouldn't change anything from the original story at all. Tags are confusing as well... I had a bit of hope when they found a "mystery knife" in his room, but after all this time, no mention of it ever again

it's very clearly either AI written or AI assisted writing so much that it almost makes no difference.