DxD: Hero x Gacha

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Couldn’t read anymore so I will list the problems. Grammar is average, not bad but not good either, it is readable though. Story starts with brief intro to system stuff by a powerful being, then immediate transmigration into dxd world. There isn’t really a downtime for anything, it’s just straight to school starting like the next day type shit. Mc talks like a typical romcom protagonist: awkward around pretty girls, easy to surrender to them, immediately chose to serve under Rias with no hesitation. The only positive thing is that he actually started training, but that’s it. For a transmigration fic, he’s just a pushover ngl. First time in school, at lunch in the cafeteria mc talks to momo in front of everybody about supernatural things, so that’s a big red flag. Anyone who has went to school knows how nosy teenagers are, in anime it’s like 100x worse! This is bad writing. The fights don’t really feel like fights. They seem more like the author is writing statements instead of feeling engaging. Also seems super easy against Raynare’s group. Even though mc did get injured and went unconscious, it didn’t feel like a first time fight to the death. It felt like a random sparring match with no stakes involved tbh. Overall, just seems like a half-crack fic that’s not really serious. It feels more laid back, struggles don’t feel like struggles, easy power gain. Doesn’t really seem all that fun or entertaining from what I read, but it might be different for others.

inspired by a hosted book, I can already tell this is going to be peak. needless to say I'm putting all my stocks on it

Google Translate Well, I'm enjoying the dynamics so far, a fanfic with a point of view where the MC doesn't enter a demonic peerage and is always welcome, let's get to the points 1-I believe that the MC must improve his confidence, I understand that it must be done gradually or it will seem strange, work on it. 2-System with the ability to combine abilities gives infinite potential to the MC. I'm looking forward to the future, just don't make the system a crutch. Deus Ex machine. Make it a support, but MC needs to train. 3-Please make it so that when he masters the skill he no longer needs to shout their names, this is very cringe and in writing it would look ridiculous like lightning breath and the enemy would stand still thinking My god, what will he do? It would be sad to read. Put a % bar to master the skill. 4- A good balance between smut and action works miracles. Don't be ashamed to write, author Sama, research a lot, I'm anxious. 5-Give more reactions to the MC's actions when he hits an enemy very hard for example or kills a terrorist, having the vision of other people receiving this news gives a more lively air to the world.Something like I understand then the world doesn't just turn when the MC is present in the scene Finally, time to accumulate chapters. Don't give up, author Sama. DxD has infinite potential in the novel. We're even starting a war with another world, so the excuse to insert other worlds is there. I hope it's a fic with thousands of chapters. See you soon. I'll be back when I have a lot of chapters accumulated. I hope the tips have helped.

So far so good. Keep it up author!

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Same old plot but here mc doesn't know about DXD and was like beta still becomes lackety to devils

very good so far, cool to see a fic with the chaos gacha.