One day, the MMORPG Genesis announced the ending server after 25 years of the game anniversary. Suzuki Ryo who played the game for a year and a half felt sad to the bottom of his heart because he have spent all of his life saving for the past 16 years just to play the game. But the game announced a final reward for the players who have played for more that a year, the reward is a free SSR monster summon. Most people who sees this announcement felt like they have been tricked because what is the use of the monster if the game is going to end in one day, but Suzuki Ryo felt like it was worth a try.

The Slime Master


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Okay, so I read about 5 chapters of this story in order to get a decent feel for it.  I apologize in advance if I come off as harsh.

The grammar is kinda bad and this comes up fairly often. The explanation of this "new" Suzuki Ryo needs work. Not only is it too short, but we don't know WHY this person appeared in a different body. I realize we are talking about a supernatural event, but still, you have to give something. Not only that, but this "new" Suzuki doesn't seem even the least bit surprised by the turn of events, it's just "Wow, I'm Suzuki now, he wasn't a nice guy." 

In a story, there is something called suspension of disbelief. In short, it's how much a reader is willing to ignore something that sounds ridiculous. You went past that point. 

A guy reincarnates in a strangers body, AND wins a SSR monster with only a 0.00001% success rate, AND another supernatural event occurs causing him to fuse with it. Again, I get that this is a supernatural story, but you can only go so far in making unlikely events happen before readers just stop and roll their eyes at you. 

Another thing, it would be a good idea to separate dialogue from different characters so it's not jumbled together are harder to follow along. Instead of: 

"Huh? oh, yes I'm fine thank you. Um, may I ask what is your name?" the woman answered "My name is Suzuki Ryo, well if you excuse me I need to go and find a job right now" then Suzuki left "Wait Ryo-kun if you would like I could hire you to work part-time at my shop?"

It should be: "Huh? oh, yes I'm fine thank you. Um, may I ask what is your name?" the woman answered 

"My name is Suzuki Ryo, well if you excuse me I need to go and find a job right now" then Suzuki left 

"Wait Ryo-kun if you would like I could hire you to work part-time at my shop?"

I mean the dialogue still needs work, but at least now it's not a pain to read. 

Why does he have 100 intelligence? Going by the scale given by this story, he should be a genius never before seen in the history of mankind, but he doesn't act like it. Especially considering he attacked that gang member and DOUBLY so for Kirito. I mean MORALLY it was the right thing to do, but it wasn't a good choice looking at his intelligence. It's almost certain they're going to come back for revenge on him or the people close to him.  Running up and attacking people at the first sign of trouble doesn't give much clues to intelligence. 

Why was a heart-shaped pendant a monster core? Monsters don't exist in this world right? 

The romance is rushed, it feels forced and unnatural. The title of the chapter itself does a pretty good job questioning the logic here. 'Was it this easy to befriend some who you sexually harass a few months before?' 

That's about it for now. I admire your determination to steadily produce chapters, but this story is going to need a lot of editing and reworking from the ground up in order to become a good story. I wish you the best.

ok  so  i read it till  chapter 10  or so -   and i must say if  yoou  exlude slime stats its just  copy- paste  of  another novel - "Neet recives dating system " .   even after gaining  slime stats  wchch  could  go  in interesting  direction -   author  just  pasted sucubus gem   and  voila -   we got "neet ..." novel  just  slightly  worse writing .    just for  that   i dont recomend  it .

I hope you can enjoy this novel I made. By the way it it’s my first time writing so I hope you can forgive my blunder in the grammatical part. I’m a high school student so I can’t update this novel a lot. But I’m going to try to update this novel once every week. So I hope this novel can be entertaining that is all for now