Ruler Of The Underworld

Really bad synopsis that doesn't really portraits anything in this novel which also has too many flaws. Author wants us to believe that swords and bows exists but not spears. They have ATM cards but no land management, no things that even existed in middle ages and not even steel was discovered. In other words, the worldbuilding is really faulty. You'll facepalm a lot of times with the absurdity of it. The System is called a dominator/engineering but it becomes some all knowing AI and engineering is forgotten. He designs a spear a crossbow and steel making devices, nothing more. The system had no reason to exist in the story(plot wise), but it's there to babysit the MC. The Mc is a mary sue. Everything he does is successful and works very quickly. He goes from street rat into one of the richest merchants in a few chapters. Everyone accepts his ideas and they grant him tons of money in a few days. He also learns to fight by himself in days and now can kill veteran guards and such. Adding insult to injury, he not only forgets the engineering part but goes full magus path with the system working as an AI to help him with it. Dropped when he was going towards a school to be a full magus. Overall this feels like the author wanted to make something(which I coudn't fully guess what) but gave up midway and decided to clone Warlock of the Magus World.

This is a great story that follows a more untraditional path as the title suggests with a mc that is (currently) much more into designing products and profit than anything eles, however the foundations have been laid for him to become more acquainted with his personal magic/cultivation. The author is also very dedicated with lots of research put into each chapter. Overall great so far and I'm excited to see where it goes

I am writing a new, more proper review now that I’ve read more of the story and am almost up to date. And I must say I’m disappointed. ***Very harsh review incoming*** Writing Quality: 2/5 While it is better than most of the garbage thats piled up on this site, I’ve seen quite a lot of punctuation errors, in fact, they are everywhere. Most of them are missing periods or misplaced commas where another punctuation mark should’ve come instead. If there was only a few of these mistakes, I could’ve forgiven it, but with the abundance that I’ve seen so far, it is quite annoying. I often find myself skipping some “sentences” because they are too long. Quotation marks are there because its actually multiple sentences with missing periods, or commas. Overly long sentences are tiring and boring to read, and I’m sure there have been others who have also skipped over some. Stability of Updates: 4/5 While your chapters are extremely short, you still, for the most part, don’t fail to deliver. In my opinion, a chapter should be at least 1k words minimum, anything below can hardly be called a chapter. Story Development: 3/5 As I’ve said in my previous review, which was rather “half-assed,” everything the mc tries to do, happens without the slightest issue. He easily became one of the richest if not THE richest in the entire city in just a week or two. You should put more obstacles in his way. Everything he does is too perfect. Character Design: 2/5 At first, I didn’t have much complaints in this area but as I kept reading, more and more problems popped up. I can imagine a 12 year old beating other 12 year olds in a fight because he has a huge advantage such as a system, but for the love of god whenever I try to imagine one discussing business with middle-aged men, it just fells apart for me. Couldn’t you have made him at least 15 or 17? I’d even say 18 and above, but webnovels seem to avoid those ages like the plague. His charisma stat is not even high, its below average for children of his age as you’ve stated yourself, but for some reason, he easily convinces anyone about anything with barely any negotiations if at all. Also, I have to ask: WTF happened in the chapter 30-31? That was some kirito-level power up. How does he fight so friggin well even thought he has NO EXPERIENCE IN FIGHTING AT ALL? Is he fighting trained fighters or toddlers? Also, I can understand that his strength rose, but HOW IN THE ALNER CAN HE IMPALE A MAN TO A WALL?! DO YOU HAVE ANY IDEA HOW MUCH STRENGTH THAT WOULD REQUIRE?! IS HE KRATOS OR SOMETHING?! With such strength, he could probably kill all of them bare-handed, with just a single slap even. Don’t even get me started on his accuracy of hitting someone mid-air. I get that he activated his skill called “motivation”(which makes me wonder if you know what it means) At first you said it would let him focus on a task, which seemed reasonable, but now it raises his strength to godly levels? And if you think something like this happens only once, ho boy are you mistaken. In chapter 35, he manages to cut someones arm off. Now, the person whose arm he cut is clearly more skilled than him, as THE NARRATOR HIMSELF SAID IT RIGHT BEFORE IT HAPPENED, but who cares about skill when you’re the MC, am I right? Off with his arm! Now I might be mistaken on this part, but as far as I know, even with a steel sword, you can’t just chop someone’s arm without knowing what you’re doing… Something like that requires not only strength but you also need to know how to cut properly, otherwise, if you’re someone inexperienced who doesn’t know how to use a sword, you’re not getting through that bone. There are way more inconsistent things like this in the novel, but I don’t want to point out every single one of them, so I’ll leave it at that. This is the part of the novel that I’m most disappointed about. The MC’s stats are misleading, and I don’t understand why you even included them in the story as it looks like they don’t matter at all. He is way too overpowered. World Background: 3/5 While you do say that Alner is not Earth, and its technology developed in a different path than us, I still don’t think spear would not exist in a world where swords do. I can see steel not being developed, or being a secret among certain groups of blacksmiths, and not being widespread. (We have evidence of steel existing all the way back in the bronze age [900-1400 BC {Might’ve gotten the date wrong, I sorta pulled it out of my ass.}] which, in my opinion means that it is not that difficult for a civilization to discover steel. Though, I’m not saying steel cannot NOT exist, just pointing out it can be known to only a select group of people, since the steel used in the bronze age was only used by certain civilizations and information on how to make it was not spread. I mean, steel swords back then were like magical swords of real life, why would you share that with your potential enemies?) Just to clarify, I’m just saying its hard to believe that spears do not exist, while swords do. And that it’s possible the steel was discovered, but not spread. It’s still fine if it didn’t exist at all. My only complaint is with the spear. While, yes, Alner is still not Earth and spear does not necessarily need to be discovered, it’s highly unlikely and immersion-breaking. You’re telling me they couldn’t see the significance of such a weapon until the MC pointed it out? It wasn’t useful before but just because he made the tip of it out of steel, it suddenly is the best weapon ever? I call bull-poo on that. ** I know my previous review said that this wasn’t such a bad novel, but as I kept reading, more and more problems popped up, ultimately ruining the novel in my eyes. It had potential at the start, but I feel that it was wasted. I may return in the future when there are more chapters to see if it has improved, but for now, I’ll be dropping this novel.

There are a few things that bother me, but if you ignore those the story is not bad. For example, his charisma stat is actually quite low, but for some reason he manages to easily convince anyone. What's the point of the stats then? When I imagine a 12 year old peasant talking business I can't help my immersion from breaking. Couldn't you have made him older? It is really difficult for me to get immersed. Whatever he does, things easily go his way without even the slightest problem occurring. I would expect people to at least prejudge him a little bit since he is just a mere 12 year old peasant. I have read up to chapter 20 in case the thing says chap 0 or something.

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I LOVE THIS STORY!! PLEASE KEEP REALISING MORE CHAPTERS! KEEP IT UP!....................................................................................................................................................................................

Interesting so far, with an RPG style reborn system and a steampunk style Tudor-esk world, the MC James is dropped into a 'lower level' world were he has to fight back against his pitiful starting position with the knowledge he accumulated in his previous life. Great read.

So far the story is nice. The chapter's output is fast Writing Quality is also good Maybe the need of one or two chapter for the world background

Some decent writing here, it may seem that there are plot holes but it is mostly just part of the overall plot, prepare for some events that make you complain or scratch your head until it is later explained, decent work across the board, I look forward to how the novel progresses as the author's writing style matures and he learns from many of the ****** mistakes all newbie writers make, This system novel is honestly better written than many of the other system novels out there, the system is not obnoxious all the time and it does not feel like the protagonist is enslaved to it. Worth a read if you have the time.

The story is good but... therr are too many inconsistencies with regards to numbers and there are so many missing informations... there are even some instances that I would think that I actually missed something from rhe lasr chapter... I just hope it got better as the story progresses............. I mean no harm, I come in peace.... No hard feelings, ok? XD!!

Great reincarnation story with a pretty OK system. I've enjoyed it a lot and I love how there isn't to much detail but more progress. It's fresh around here.

Everybody in the world is dumb expect mc and some people around him. The world is very under developed and everything is unrealistic. Eg. Swords exist but spears do not. They have banks with atm cards like things but no army.

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This is honestly a wonderful novel, I have read easily over 150 novels up to their current translations at the time and I can say I love the start of this novel, the first few chapters left me a little wanting for world building but it gets filled in pretty quickly, the system and the world have been left pretty open so there is still time for adjustments, I’m incredibly happy on the aspect that not every flipping noble he meets will try to rob him or kill him. I’m incredibly fed up with all the Chinese nationalism pride **** almost every wuxia novel has. My request to the author would be to spend time focusing on his power ups and becoming op with his system and to get the MC to drop his aversion to killing humans because frankly humans are the worst enemy in any world Also if you make a patron I will support you