some grammar mistakes but overall a great story but you made him strong a bit too much almost killing Loke in that merely move then what about a real punch who can take it
6 years ago
2
Ling_Mingdan_Hou
HAHA A novelAbout me Am i that Famous even after dieing.u are worthy of lion sin escanor.Tho mael my predeccesor saws its ass...........................
5 years ago
1
jaro_onody
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6 years ago
1
Sorrias
You clearly do not know how to write a story, the story itself is not bad, your grammar is, it is awful.
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some grammar mistakes but overall a great story but you made him strong a bit too much almost killing Loke in that merely move then what about a real punch who can take it
HAHA A novelAbout me Am i that Famous even after dieing.u are worthy of lion sin escanor.Tho mael my predeccesor saws its ass...........................
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You clearly do not know how to write a story, the story itself is not bad, your grammar is, it is awful. ........................................................................................................